Immortal Wars: Light, Blood, & Tears Part 15

(Disclaimer: A warning to those who continue.  This is a sequel to a previous story.  Both of these were written in the mid-1990’s.  While the first one was slightly edited and vanity press published, this one has not been touched in over 20 years.  I figure I should do something with it and people may get a laugh or fright from how I used to be.  Every author comes from somewhere, so this is part of my origin.  To that end, I am deeply sorry for whatever nightmares I will inflict on the literary world and the American English language.  Enjoy?)

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The sky is slowly becoming dark with storm clouds as Draveon and Cybro walk down Broadway.  They have finished getting everything on the list of electronics and presents.  Their only problem was when Draveon broke a case of crystal cups that he bumped into.  Thankfully, Adriana’s credit card had enough to pay for all of the damages and presents.  Since the two immortals had several hours before meeting with Adriana and Tegam, they decided to take in a show.

“Why did you make me go to this?  It was so stupid,” complains Cybro, who is still wearing the suit.  They had been getting strange looks throughout the performance from some of the people in the theater.  These looks of curiosity continue as Draveon and Cybro walk down the busy street.

“You have absolutely no class.  Even with that suit, you are still not able to enjoy the harmonious sound of music.  Didn’t you feel the pain of the characters?” Draveon replies in a sarcastic tone.

“You just enjoyed the fighting scenes.”

“Of course.  I slept through the rest of it.  It would have been a great play if they had forgotten about putting a plot in it.  Am I right?”

“I just wonder how that girl could keep singing for ten minutes after she was shot in the chest.  It made the entire show totally unbelievable.  We still have a couple of hours before we meet with the others.  Can’t let our presence known just yet.  Where should we go?” asks Cybro.  Draveon is looking around when a loud rumbling starts to shake the ground.

He says, “I think we should get something to eat.  That was my stomach.  That’s embarrassing.  Now, where can we go in this town in order to get some really good food?  Do you even eat, Cybro?”

“I can.  But I just do not need to.  Although Mindtrigger just recently modified my systems to incorporate food into my energy cells.  So to answer your question, no I do not have to eat, but I am capable of the act.”

“Oh.  Well, I think I saw an interplanetary cuisine restaurant.  Strange finding one on this planet.  I think it was on West 57th.  You know the building we passed with the planet and the star coming out of it.”  Draveon crosses the street without looking and causes several cars to screech to a halt.  The drivers just stare at the big man that would probably hurt their cars more than the cars would damage him.

“I did not think that the Vorkis had sent any settlers to this planet.  That sign you mentioned means that it is an alien safe-haven.  But I remember seeing only humans going into the structure.  It could just be a coincidence,” mentions Cybro.  Without warning, a hand shoots out of an alley and yanks the disguised robot off the street.  Draveon silently follows and finds the barrel of a pistol against his chest.

“Hand over your money,” orders a young man with no hair and all leather clothing.  He is pointing a small gun at Cybro and his three friends all have their weapons aimed at Draveon.  The other two young men are wearing jeans and bright orange shirts along with tie-dye windbreakers.  The fourth member of this group is a small girl wearing a faded baseball cap, tattered jeans, and a dark red shirt with holes in it.  Her only intact piece of clothing is a denim jacket.

“I’d put the weapons away.  They won’t do you any good,” says Draveon.  Two of the men cock their guns.  Draveon grabs the guy with his gun pointed at Cybro and easily snaps the man’s wrist.  With a single punch to the guy’s head, Draveon sends the corpse flying into an open dumpster.

“Anybody else want to try and shoot me?”  The two other young men look at each other and run at Draveon.  He lets them punch and kick him several times before he gets a hold of one of the attackers.  Draveon holds him up by his throat and throws him through the side of the nearby dumpster.  The man’s legs hang limply from the ragged hole.  His terrified partner decides to jump at Cybro and attempts to stick a small knife into the robot’s gut.

“Nice try,” whispers Cybro when the crook looks at the broken knife.  A large claw comes out of the suit where the knife made a cut.  It clamps around the stunned man’s torso and twists it into something that resembles a Van Gogh picture.  The body is dropped into the dumpster along with the other two dead men.

The young girl drops her gun and turns to run down the alley.  Draveon grabs the girl by the back of her jacket and lifts her up to his face.  He carries her to the back of the alley, which ends in a wooden fence and boxes of trash.  As the frantic girl struggles, her baseball cap falls off and Draveon suddenly notices that she couldn’t be more than eighteen years old.  Even though the light is awful, he can tell that the brown-haired girl is actually very pretty.

“Please, sir.  Don’t kill me like you did to those other guys.  I just needed the money to get some food for my kid and me.  I swear I won’t tell anyone about what you two did.  Just don’t’ kill me,” cries the girl.  Cybro hears this and stares at her with his mouth agape.  Draveon lets her gently fall on her butt and bends down to look at her directly in the face.  She starts to move away from him once she notices that his eyes are bright red.

“You have a child?  But you’re not even old enough to legally drink in this country.  How old is your kid?” asks Draveon.

“He’s two years old.  Listen to me, mister.  Just let me go and I’ll never bother you again.”

“What about the father?  Where is he?”

“Damned if I know.  He never called me after everybody in school found out I was pregnant.  I couldn’t even get him to help me when my father threw me out of the house.  Eventually he moved to another town.  My old man didn’t want a slut ruining the family name.  Can I please go now?”

“Not just yet.”

“Come on, Draveon.  Leave the girl alone.  We have better things to do and we have a lot of time to do it in.  Just accept that Earth is a much different place than when we were first on this planet,” whines Cybro.  Draveon waves him off and the disguised robot walks toward the street in order to wait.

“The hell was he talking about?  Did you two escape from a mental institute and think that you’re aliens?  That’s just what I don’t need right now.  I have to get back to my kid before my friend has to go to work.  So please let me go,” the girl says.  She tries to walk past the large man, but is gently pushed back to the wooden fence.

“Your friend has work.  Why don’t you ask your friend to get you a job at her workplace?  Try to get some money without breaking the law.”

The girl begins laughing hysterically before saying, “Doing stuff like she does is what got me into trouble in the first place.  I am not going to become some streetwalking boy toy.  It may pay mucho dinero, but I have too many problems right now.  I don’t need any more.”

“What is your name?”

“My name?  It’s Sandra Hunter.  My son’s name is Brian.  Why do you want to know my name?”

“Just to put a name to the face of a kid who I’m going to help.  Here’s a hundred dollars.  Take care and try to find a better way to survive.  Now leave before I remember that I’m not a nice guy,” says Draveon.  He hands the nervous girl a pack of twenty-dollar bills and she sprints out of the alley.

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The Crying Hero: Saving Your Life While Getting Dehydrated

Midoriya from My Hero Academia

I couldn’t really look into the Bully Hero without making a post about the opposite side of the coin.  The Crying Hero can be picked on by the Bully Hero, but they can also operate alone.  The key point is that they are fairly sensitive even if they are tough enough to get into big brawls and win.  You would think that this type of hero is fairly easy to right and gain acceptance for . . . Nope.

Crying is seen as a sign of weakness by many people.  It’s really the reaction of a person going through too much pain for them to handle.  After all, we cry or tear up when we suffer physical injury, so why is it weird that we do so when mentally or emotionally wounded?  Heroes put themselves into situations where a mistake can cost someone their life.  Many possess a sense of empathy and kindness, which is a driving force to them becoming a hero instead of staying home.  So, it makes sense that you will have some who don’t have the best control when it comes to pain or even victory.  Crying is a natural reaction, so it’s a shame that people see it entirely as a negative.

I ran into this over the course of Legends of Windemere too.  Luke Callindor had some crying moments throughout the series.  I would get messages or see critiques that said this made him weak and unappealing as a hero.  Forget that he went through hell and was tortured too.  Yet, Nyx and Sari had just as much suffering with crying moments, but nobody seemed to get upset about that.  This is why I think the Crying Hero is accepted more as a female instead of a male.  Just look at Midoriya and how part of his character development is that he tones down the crying.  I’m happy that he still tears up even in later stories because I don’t want him to lose that sensitivity.  It makes him stand out in contrast to Bakugo the Bully Hero, who has had a few scenes where he’s shown tears, but it’s come with anger.  These are manga and anime too, so it could be a cultural thing.  Western ideals definitely have manly men with the emotional depth of a clogged toilet near the top of the list.

Are there any tricks to writing a Crying Hero?  Nothing as difficult as the Bully Hero because the key point is to show that they have emotions.  They are human enough to demonstrate the feelings that we don’t find appealing, which should make them more relatable.  No matter how strong and unbeatable a hero is, they will benefit from revealing their heart.  It doesn’t have to be crying either.  They can rant in frustration, mope, talk openly about feeling like a failure, or anything that shows they are capable of emotional suffering.  This makes their victories and pushing forward more potent with a potential bonus of inspiring readers to do the same.

Authors may be hesitant to do this too.  It comes down to the idea that heroes need to be larger than life.  This used to be a bigger issue where the good guys couldn’t die or be shown bleeding, so it’s not as prevalent.  Yet, it’s still around on the emotional level these days.  Your hero can be battered to the brink of death in a gory display with an audience not blinking an eye.  They fall to their knees crying because they failed to save the day and you’ll get people complaining that they are weak.  Although, that is kind of the point of the whole thing, which I think some authors and readers forget.  You want heroes to show weakness to make them more humor, especially in the face of loss and pain.

So, what do you think about the Crying Hero?  Could you write one or enjoy reading about one?

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Don’t Talk Like That: How to Write Good Dialogue–Punctuation

Hi SErs! Harmony here 🙂 Today, I’d like to take another look at dialogue. Because this is such a large topic, I have spread the topic over a few …

Don’t Talk Like That: How to Write Good Dialogue–Punctuation
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Teaser Tuesday: Boredom of a Monster #fantasy #vampires

Cover Art by Alison Hunt

Time for another teaser for War of Nytefall: Savagery.  This is a fairly simple one with a fun question at the end.  Enjoy.

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The Bully Hero: Saving Your Life and Calling You Names

Bakugo from My Hero Academia

It would be nice if all heroes acted politely, loving, and . . . well . . . ideally heroic even in fiction.  Honestly, I think this is what people expect more so today than when I was growing up.  Even anti-heroes don’t have as many edges as they used to, so a character like Bakugo up there can really ruffle some feathers.  I mean:

As you can tell, the issue that appears is the overall meanness and anger that a Bully Hero displays.  They spit insults, are terrible in team settings, and can be selfish.  These are attributes that many people place with villains.  At the very least, it’s with a hero who will either go evil or isn’t the main character.  They could be a rival who is created in contrast to the more noble protagonist.  Sadly, this ends up being where we pigeonhole heroes with this kind of attitude.  It makes Bakugo a rarity and explains why there are many who don’t like him.  After all, he isn’t nice.

Of course, this doesn’t mean you can’t or shouldn’t make a focal hero with a bully mentality.  There is room for growth and softening without losing all of their edges, but it is difficult to keep the audience around for the opening stages.  The insults, threats, and callous behavior can be off-putting, which is why some authors will typically steer clear of this persona.  There’s that danger of going too far and losing the more noble aspects of their personality.  It’s easy to do since we can get so focused on the negative to make sure those come across.  After all, we don’t want the character to abruptly turn into a nice person.  The delicate balance needs to be maintained throughout the entire adventure or until the character sheds the bully personality.  Not always possible if they still gain success and victories while being a jerk.

I think the most important part of a Bully Hero is to make it clear that this character wants to do good.  They openly demonstrate that they are here to save the day regardless of their attitude.  Continuing to use Bakugo as an example, he wants to be the greatest hero in the world and sees everyone else as stepping stones.  He threatens and bullies others, especially Midoriya, but moves into the mindset of a combat-based hero when that is what’s needed.  You never get a true sense that Bakugo will turn evil, but the possibility is there to keep his edge for the opening section.  Then, he grows and starts to accept help in some fashion as well as refusing an opportunity to be a villain.  All of this combined turns him into an abrasive character, but one that you can’t deny is a hero.

My son always thought of Bakugo as a minor villain because of the attitude, which makes sense for a child.  We teach children that bullying is bad and this creates the sense that those who do so are villains.  So, a hero like that won’t be perceived as one until they outright prove themselves.  It was around season 3 of the anime that my son began to see Bakugo as a hero, but that was because he loudly declared that he would be one.  It was a scene that started his change and led to scenes where he was visibly softer regardless of the insults and threats.  At this point, the other characters and the audience get a sense of that simply being the type of person he is.  You need a Bully Hero to show their vulnerability and softer side even if it’s only peeking through.  That’s how you make sure that they are never perceived as a villain.

I’m sure everybody can think of another Bully Hero, but I wonder if they’re from an older period of time.  At least with American shows and movies, I can’t think of many that appeared in recent years.  Those that are violent aren’t verbal jerks and only threaten the bad guys, so they remain team players.  Maybe they’re simply not popular or more difficult to write than I realize.  What do other people think?

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Writing Styles: Extroversion and Introversion

Hello SE friends, Gwen with you today, and together we’ll be exploring how extroversion or introversion affects our writing. Let’s begin with a story…

Writing Styles: Extroversion and Introversion
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Smorgasbord Bookstore and Cafe – New Book on the Shelves – #Fantasy Savagery (War of Nytefall Book 6) by Charles E. Yallowitz

Delighted to share the news of the latest book by Charles E. Yallowitz…Savagery (War of Nytefall Book 6) About the book For the first time in over a …

Smorgasbord Bookstore and Cafe – New Book on the Shelves – #Fantasy Savagery (War of Nytefall Book 6) by Charles E. Yallowitz
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A Month of Poetry in June?

I toss random stuff here on Sundays, so here we go.

I’m trying to set up a month of poems for June since it’s going to be a rough one.  School year is ending and I’ll either have a cover artist for Do I Need to Use a Dragon? or still be hunting.  Personal life stuff may be in the way as well.  Not to mention I’m out of writing-based topics to share.  So, I was thinking of indulging in my poetic side for a month.

Only thing I’m trying to decide is how to do it.  I still think I’ll use Mondays to make a poem for each of my published series.  Then, I’m stumped.  Do I come up with random topics, continue promoting books in some fashion, or try to think of a weekly theme?  I know I’m going to stick with free form style because I’m too drained and busy to attempt a more structured poem.  So, I’m just hitting a wall.

Does anybody else do poetry on their blog?  I’m curious as to how you come up with topics or if I’m trying to hard.  Be happy to hear any feedback on this idea.

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Goal Post: A New Set of Outlines . . . Also Life

I’m writing this Friday night after going out to a late birthday dinner with a friend.  We delayed it to allow me to have more time with my son.  Anyway, that means I’m really tired, but still writing this to make sure I can sleep in.  That or get on my bike without worrying about making the goal post.  Either way, I’m sleepy and going to be rambling at times.

Work and life were chaotic.  Schedules got rearranged.  This was actually the last week of the quarter for me, so it was really busy.  My son is having trouble in school as things get more complicated.  If I wasn’t juggling work, helping him with homework, or interacting with the ex-wife, I was trying to figure things out.  We may have found the problem and he passed his latest test.  Hopefully, it can carry over into other subjects and we see him pull out of this downward slope.  It’s been rough because he does great with studying and homework, but tests are an issue.  Frustrating that kids can be really smart and know things, but they’re simply bad a taking tests.

It’s been a week since War of Nytefall: Savagery came out.  Thank you to everyone who helped promote the book and bought a copy.  At this point, I’ve sold 5 copies at 99 cents each.  So, it’s not moving, but I shouldn’t be surprised.  Don’t have thousands of dollars to drop into promoting or hours of free time to do things.  I’m struggling to maintain this blog and a slight Twitter presence.  I’ll be happy if I can sell 15 copies by the end of the month.  I will say the 99 cent price drop gave me a little movement, but not enough to do more than buy a weekly pack of Twizzlers.  That’s author life these days, I guess.

The big plan for the weekend is to start outlining Tales of the Slumberlord.  I think I have 8 books here.  There’s a trilogy I have after this with the same hero, so I’m dancing between leaving it alone or making it a book in the series.  Thankfully, all of these tales are self-contained since Darwin’s shtick is to wander from one adventure to another.  He’s the connector with the main plot going over his head while he involves himself in the destinies of others.  It’s only the first and final book where his own tale is in the spotlight.  I don’t know if this makes it any easier.  Guess I need to tackle the first book and move on from there.  I have to read over the general synopsis too because I can’t remember if it takes place in one city or several.

The outlining has me nervous because I haven’t made one of these since . . . Well, I was still married when I made one from scratch.  I’ve done some short stories, but those are quick scenes.  These are the 3-4 section chapters.  Might take me all weekend to get one finished, which is fine.  I don’t know if Darwin stories will be as lengthy as previous tales, but I’m going to have to think things through.  He can be random in the direction he goes in, but also things are ‘black/white’ to him, so he can end up walking right to the finish line.  Think of someone who is so ‘black/white’ that mind games depending on nuance don’t even register.  Darwin is starting to become more of a challenge than I though in terms of personality.

Wish I had more to report, but I don’t.  TV was me getting through the original ‘Tenchi Muyo’ episodes.  The series isn’t as good as I remembered.  Can’t put my finger on why I kept losing interested either.  Thinking of tossing ‘Ranma 1/2’ on to get through more of that while I outline this week.  The big series I want to watch are looking more like summer things when I have more viewing time.  I need something that are practically mindless, so ‘Ranma 1/2’ may work best.  Been a while, but I remember it being fairly repetitive and predictable.

I think I’m posting about the Poetry Month tomorrow.  Not 100% certain since I’ve been moving stuff around.  I don’t like the new look of WordPress when it comes to looking at my posts.  I can’t choose a category and look at only that grouping, which is what I used to help keep track of Teaser Tuesdays and Immortal Wars.  The whole thing looks fairly ugly too.  I’ve had to use the block system to make a few posts too.  A few volunteers looked to  have trouble with it as well, so War of Nytefall: Savagery took a hit from the clunky interface.  Not like anything will change.  The new system is here to stay whether we hate it or loathe it.

Goals of the week:

  1. Get sleep.
  2. Biking.
  3. Outline Tales of the Slumberlord
  4. Watch a little TV
  5. Puzzles
  6. Get some fresh air
  7. Wheeze due to fresh air having pollen
  8. Get more sleep
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Ask-A-Character: Clyde

Cover Art by Alison Hunt

I haven’t done one of these in a long time.  Mostly because they are very hit or miss with more on the latter.  Yet, I do wonder if people would ask Clyde any questions.  He is the protagonist of War of Nytefall.  On the other hand, not many have read the series or pay full attention to the posts about him.  I still get messages talking as if he’s the villain going up against a band of vampire hunters that I mysteriously haven’t mentioned on this blog at all.  Weird.  So, who or what is Clyde?

Clyde is:

  • A former thief who became a vampiric thief prior to the Great Cataclysm.
  • He created a gang of thieves within the vampire world, which included Mab Winthrop (his partner), Chastity Sullivan, Titus Winthrop, Bob, and Luther Grathan.  Those last 3 were the leaders of the mercenary side of the gang.  Chastity would do the blackmailing and information gathering.  Clyde and Mab were the ones who would do heists.
  • Clyde had allied himself with Xavier Tempest in the old days because they got along.  This is also why General Kenneth Decker was considered a good friend and a partial member of the gang.
  • Clyde and Mab broke up because of a misunderstanding caused by Chastity.
  • Clyde tried to steal a Duragian (God of the Sun) artifact and was caught.  His execution was interrupted by the Great Cataclysm, which buried him for 50 years along with the entire temple city.
  • Upon his return, Clyde gradually learned that he was what would eventually become a Dawn Fang.  He was the first one of this new vampire breed.  He had a heartbeat, could eat human food, didn’t need to kill for blood, and didn’t grow weak in the sunlight.
  • He has a severe battle lust that may be a side-effect of his Lord’s Rage power.  These two things are unique to him, so he fights every day to keep them in check.  His other powers are monstrous physical abilities, illusions, and heightened senses.
  • His relationship with Mab has been rekindled, but they’re dealing with a rough patch in the books right now.
  • Clyde and Lost are having to work closer together in War of Nytefall: Savagery
  • He has a weapon that has been enchanted to fit into his pocket even thought it’s a large sword.  The weapon is connected to a gauntlet that he puts on his hand and it drains his blood through crystal needles to vibrate the blade.  This gives a it a makeshift chainsaw effect, but also risks setting off his Lord’s Rage.
  • Clyde has a pet Eusu.
  • He named his kingdom Nytefall in order to mock Xavier who rules the ancient kingdom of Nyte.

That’s all there is about him, so maybe some questions can come about.  We’ll see how this goes.

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