If Die Hard is a Christmas movie, then…

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There is a debate that rages every year across social media about whether Die Hard is a Christmas movie. It’s placed at Christmas time, and it seems to get shown around the holidays on various cable channels. I’m not entering the debate, but I enjoyed the film. There’s even one thread I saw about whether it’s a missing Harry Potter film, because Bruce Willis chases Professor Snape around a spooky building. (Not touching that one at all.)

I’m here in my usual corny style to make a different connection. If Die Hard is a Christmas movie, then The Playground is a Christmas book. This is one I wrote a few years ago, and I have a deal for you. I don’t usually run deals, but it’s the holidays, so why not?

Blurb:

The hottest new toys of the Christmas season are the Playground Network dolls. They contain a worldwide social…

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7 Tips to Writing Semi-Coherent Dialogue

You would be surprised how often people get confused on writing dialogue.  To be fair, it isn’t easy.  Not everyone uses the same amount or the same structure.  You have a variation of tags and tactics when it comes to dialogue.  Don’t even get me started on the long paragraphs of one character speaking that you have to figure out how to break up or throw in some action parts to reveal he or she is doing more than jabbering away without moving.  So, I’m going to give some suggestions on how to freshen up your dialogue . . . That or I’m about to make it worse.

  1. If you have two characters going back and forth, you can eventually stop using the tags altogether.  At least for this conversation, you can go without signifying who is talking because the reader has realized there are only two people.  Large chunks of conversation might be tougher to do, but comedic banter can be done this way since it’s supposed to fast.  Just don’t throw in a third person with no warning and then wonder why people are angry.
  2. Do NOT forget punctuation.  You might know somebody who speaks so quickly that it’s like they’ve been keeping the same run-on sentence for years.  That doesn’t mean people can understand what is being said.  Your characters might pass out from lack of breathing too.
  3. Try not to repeat the same piece of information.  If most of the characters weren’t around for the reveal then don’t have them learn one at a time.  Call a meeting or let them figure it out on their own at a climactic moment.  Doing otherwise leads to a population of boring, repetitive dialogues that people will remember more than the witty lines you’ve peppered your manuscript with.
  4. Stop reusing the same power phrase every few pages.  I know you want a tagline to put on a poster, coffee mug, t-shirt, adult diaper, or whatever swag you plan on giving out at the book signing.  You know that friend who will respond with ‘I am Groot’ or ‘I am Batman’ every time you say hello, so you no longer get any enjoyment from those phrases?  Yeah, don’t do that as the author.  Even the best line can lose its charm if you hear it too often, so use it sparingly.
  5. When writing dialogue, try saying it out loud to see if it makes sense.  Your ears can be better judges than your eyes when it comes to speaking parts.  Just be warned that you don’t want to attempt your villain’s threatening speech in the middle of the produce section.  It may lead to you getting first pick of the fresh bananas because people are staying away from you, but good luck getting help at the nearby deli counter.
  6. If you want to put accents into your dialogues then you need to research them.  Listen to people speak with it and make note of how it sounds.  Try to find other books that have used them because punctuation and slang is very important here.  You don’t want to declare that you’re using a Boston accent when it’s really a mutant hybrid of Welsh, German, and the sound you make when you get your hair caught in the car door.
  7. Don’t forget the non-verbal parts of dialogue.  Human communication is more about body language and voice tone than the words we use.  I could say ‘Welcome home’, but my tone can be the difference between genuine, sarcastic, and threatening.  You can accomplish this by adding words near the tag to denote emotions such as ‘angrily says’ or ‘dryly mentions’.  I know these aren’t popular for some reason, but they can really help here.  Having the character sigh, roll their eyes, cross their arms, and do other physical activities help lock down their temperaments too.
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How to Publish with KDP: Overview and Invitation

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Hello SErs. Harmony here. From January 2020, I plan on running a post series dedicated to taking a step-by-step look at how to get your finished manuscript from your computer and on sale on Amazon in both ebook and paperback. Some of us do that ourselves already, and for those of you who know all this, then you have my apologies in advance, lol. For those of you who hire this out, or do it yourself but you’re not that confident, then it is my hope that this series will prove invaluable for you.

So, why am I posting about this now? Well, while I have an outline plan for the planned series, I would also like to ask for and invite your input. Below, I will list the rough points that I’ve come up with so far. If there’s anything not on the list that…

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Revisiting Legends: Kira Grasdon the Tortured Soul #fantasy #adventure

Cover Art by Sean Harrington

Within the pages of Legends of Windemere, one character will always stand out to me as the wild card.  The reason is because she was unexpected, but she also developed a really big love/hate relationship with readers.  Some seemed to hate her more than Stephen Kernaghan who was an unapologetic rapist.  Still, I stuck to my guns and didn’t kill her off and even gave her a solo adventure in Quest of the Brokenhearted.  I did this because she had a story to tell.  Now, I’m going to try to explain it in pieces, which means we’re stepping away from the regular structure.  Let’s take a look at Kira Grasdon from beginning to end.

Origin: Who in All of Windemere Are You?

Keep in mind that the Legends of Windemere series is based off a Dungeons & Dragons game I played in college.  I say this a lot and point out who in the cast is from that version.  Kira Grasdon was never in the original game, the original write-up, or the original outlines.  She was added during an editing run of Beginning of a Hero when I realized that I needed more students.  So, Kira debuted in one chapter section as a spoiled, whining girl named Linny.  Every few editing runs, I found that I needed something and I would plop her into that role.  She sparred with Luke in one scene and was made to be a decoy in another.  That’s when something odd happened.

Linny developed a good backstory since I needed her to be more than background and one-time comic relief.  She was the heiress of a merchant company who has lived her life under the expectations of others.  Prior to this adventure, she merely became whoever she needed to be in order to survive in her upper class world.  It was actually the same ‘born into fame’ origin as Luke Callindor, but the opposite path.  While he railed against it to remain true to himself, Linny used it to her advantage and nearly lost her identity until this story.  The characters really hit it off and a romance blossomed, which led to the name of ‘Kira Grasdon’.

Unfortunately, I ended up having another problem on my hands.

The Hated Open Relationship

Before Kira entered the story, Luke Callindor was supposed to build a strong romance with Sari.  Even though she was set to be kidnapped and comatose for a bit, they were going to be a true love tale.  I always had trouble with this since it seemed too perfect and Sari was evolving differently in my head.  Things became worse when Kira and Luke became a couple in the first book.  It threw all three characters into a horrible meat grinder that I needed time to figure out.  After all, Kira came off as love and stability while Sari had passion and excitement.  A Luke who wanted to settle down would go for Kira while one that couldn’t shake the wanderlust would go for Sari.  It was frustrating and my solution wasn’t clean.

First, I decided that this was not going to be a smooth and pretty relationship for any of those involved.  There would be pain, confusion, and mistakes.  Still, I needed to allow for Luke to be romantically linked to Kira and Sari WITHOUT it being an affair.  This is when I designed the Bor’daruk culture where you are allowed to date multiple people before getting married. Once you’re hitched, you stay hitched because the punishment for divorce was exile.  This is due to a period where rampant divorce was tearing the social fabric of the desert city apart.  Anyway, Kira allowed Luke to follow this tradition even though there were protocols..  You’re main squeeze needs to be introduced to all of your other suitors and they get to have an opinion on it.  Since Luke was traveling, he couldn’t really do this and here we have the problem.  It wasn’t a good situation and was rife with mistakes, which made sense since these characters were young, immature, inexperienced, and one was a little broken.

Sadly, this would be a problem for many readers, but not until a character appeared saying he slept with Kira.  It was in Allure of the Gypsies and she didn’t even appear in that book.  I saw people wanted her to be killed off and insulted even though it was established that this was perfectly fine for her culture.  A few people wanted Luke to kill the other guy or at least attack him, but he had agreed to this open relationship.  It’s what led to him feeling like he could strike one up with Sari, which would go on to affect the relationships between all three.  I see this as doing the following:

  1. Luke was made to think more about the kind of future he wanted and evolve in how he interacted with others.
  2. Sari was helped to heal a bit since it was a loving relationship.  She also discovered how she got a better sense of fulfillment from loving connections that were closer to friendship than romance.
  3. Kira was made to see how the traditions of her family/culture, which she had practically been a slave to, had some major flaws.

This is probably the biggest part of Kira Grasdon when it comes to the main series, which is kind of sad.  You might even see comments about this below.  Back when the book came out, I noticed some people would only turn up if her name was mentioned.  I’m still amazed at the impact she had, but I wish it was more positive.

Fate of Kira Grasdon

This post is getting long, so I’m going to sum things up.  Honestly, I could probably make a whole week for Kira by touching on her origin, the open relationship issue, and the parts I’m about to go over.

Kira had an amazing evolution where she went from a spoiled heiress to a formidable warrior.  Not being destined to fight the Baron, she found herself in a bad spot that would usually cause her pain.  Much of her misery stemmed from this, but she continued fighting and pushing forward.  I had her reappear with slight reinventions every time to show that she was training, changing, and improving when she wasn’t in the adventure.  It started with her mastering her kusari-gama (chain and sickle) and then I had her come up with various combat tactics.  She had the resources to get her hands on special equipment, which helped me flush out the artifact/relic system.  Eventually, she was able to stand side-by-side with the champions in the final battle.

And then she fell from grace and entered her own adventure.  Quest of the Brokenhearted was inspired by Castlevania and I had it sitting on the shelf since college.  It finally worked when I put Kira into the adventure, but she always started as a shell of her former self.  It became a story of life and death in that she wasn’t sure which one she preferred.  Maybe I was too mean to Kira, but I find that she always surprises me and pulls out of it.  The finale of her solo adventure is no exception.

(Hope everyone made it to the end of this one.  Sorry that the middle section took up so much space.)

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Sally’s Cafe and Bookstore – Christmas Book Fair – New Book on the Shelves #Paranormal #Fantasy Wake-Robin Ridge Book 4: The Light by Marcia Meara

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Deck the Halls for 2019

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Back when I was in grad school (VCFA), each new class had the assignment of choosing a class name. Usually these names had something to do with books or writing. My class chose the Secret Gardeners based on the book The Secret Garden.

With that being said, this is the second of two holiday season book giveaways (the first described in this post), this time featuring three more awesome Secret Gardener classmates: Laurie Morrison, Laura Sibson, and Nicole Valentine, all of whom stopped by for a brief chat today. Though they appeared on the blog here, here, and here to discuss their novels, and copies were given away before, another copy of each book will be given away this time. ’Tis the season!

 

 

   

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Using Dialogue in Fiction: This Is a Debate?

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I was a little confused when I stumbled onto the debate about the use of dialogue in fiction.  At first, I thought it was the method or amount of use, which is probably how it started.  By the time I showed up to listen, the people were divided into two camps.  One claiming that dialogue is an essential tool of storytelling and the other saying that it was an archaic trope that is no longer necessary.  Well . . . I’m only going to touch on what I think about dialogue because I’m sure this differs depending on the person.

As I’ve stated many times over the years, I write in third person present tense.  This means you’re reading stuff as it unfolds and it’s through a spectator perspective instead of a first person narrator.  Because of this, I can’t really use flashbacks to cover explanations of places and events.  It’s clunky and disjointed if I’m leaping through time periods when I write in this style.  I can jump forward, but the past becomes the present if I go there and that gets confusing.  This means I have fewer exposition tools for world-building and the dreaded info dump can look rather appealing.  I used this when I started and tried to use flourishing language, which is what made me wordy in my writing.  Unfortunately, I can still slide too far into the past by talking about the event in detail in a way that makes it sound like it’s happening now.  What can I do?

Dialogue to the rescue!

As long as I have a character who would know the information I wish to share and another who is curious, I can build the past into my world.  In Beginning of a Hero, it was Fritz Warrenberg who did this as well as Fizzle.  Throughout the rest of the series, I had nearly every character step into the role of tour guide/teacher.  It was all done through dialogue and having someone ask a question that a reader would have either at the time or down the road.  Think of it as a preemptive Q&A.  If I couldn’t have the characters converse then I wouldn’t be able to explain a lot of stuff.  Another benefit here is that many of them were not that verbose, so the explanations went right to the point.  It’s a much better route to take than the info dump, which can result in a lot of extraneous details that will turn a reader off.

Outside of the world-building, I find dialogue is where you can show more of the characters.  They demonstrate how they feel by using various tags or adding body language to the conversation.  You can keep the second part even if you get rid of dialogue, but it can miss the mark at times.  I have seen people state that tags need to go because they’re too restrictive.  While I can see that argument, I wouldn’t try it and think there is enough variety and nuance to keep them alive.  Sure, ‘he said, she said, repeat’ is dull, but you still have claims, says, exclaims, yells, mentions, explains, shouts, moans, groans, mutters, whispers, etc.  I see that as being more helpful in demonstrating a character’s emotions and development.

So, what does everyone else think about dialogue?  Anybody agree that it needs to be retired?

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War of Nytefall: Eradication Volunteers Needed!

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Here’s my first call for anyone who wishes to help promote War of Nytefall: Eradication.  This is the 4th book of my vampire series.  To be clear, nearly every character is a vampire and it follows the events surrounding the appearance of a new breed called Dawn Fangs.  The war has been fairly cold with other enemies stepping between the old-world vampires of Nyte and Clyde’s new kingdom of Nytefall.  This time, it’s a cult that has broken away from the Sun God religion and possesses a weapon that may have the power to kill Clyde the Dawn Fang progenitor.  He might actually have to fear this thing.

My goal is to release the book at the end of February and continue hyping on my blog in March.  I’m going to be asking volunteers to choose a day in March and try to spread people out in that month.  The choices of posts (sent in html or Word) are the following:

  1. General ‘Book is Live’ post with blurb, teaser, author bio, cover, and sales info.
  2. A specialized post that we can discuss a topic for in the comments or by email.

I’m really hoping to get at least a dozen volunteers, so please share this post or direct friends to it.  If you know anywhere that I can go to ask for help then I’ll head over there too.  It’s been a long time since I tried to set up a blog tour, so I’m kind of rusty and out of the loop.  Any help would be appreciated.

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A Week to Remember . . . Give Me a Minute . . . So Much Happened

I’m writing this Friday night before I pass out, but I can’t tell if the post or the collapse will win this race.  A common statement among people I know is that this week felt like it went on forever.  Not always in a bad way, but there weren’t many moments to breathe.  Ended on Friday the 13th too, so maybe that’s what caused all the trouble.  Had a really full and big moon for the last night or two as well.  That would explain a lot of what I was getting thrown my way.

Now, I got 1.5 chapters done last weekend, which was a great start.  It would have been more, but I had some errands that stopped me from finishing the half.  My plan was to do that throughout the week, except I found that the universe was destined to make me routinely collapse on my bed by the end of everything.  The big chapter I wrote was actually an all villain one because I had a few scenes that got pulled from the flanking chapters.  She hadn’t made an appearance since the prologue, so I needed to give her more time before she became more hands on.  I’m enjoying this character because she’s kind of a like Chastity Sullivan, but with less shame and morality.  Basically, I’m writing a very lustful and conniving character who is smart enough to know that she has to avoid going up against Clyde without a secret weapon.  Very different from the more arrogant villains who have littered War of Nytefall.  I’m looking forward to writing her again next weekend even though she’s spawned from a rough source.

School was busy because we had field trips, a dance on Friday night, and I had to run around helping with a lot of other things.  Only one week left before a two week break, so there’s a lot to be done.  The field trip went off smoothly and the kids I was helping did great.  I managed to snag two puzzles (Detective Pikachu 1,000 piece and Prince John from Disney’s Robin Hood 1,000 piece) as I followed one kid through the toy section.  I mean, I literally had to do a quick scan and yoink as I power-walked by because this was a kid on a mission.  As my dad said, it sounds like I got my steps in.  My legs are kind of numb as I write this.

*eyes getting heavy*

Briefly, I’ll say that the Friday dance was a lot of fun.  I brought my son who got to meet several of my coworkers and students.  He was really nervous and had some crying fits before we left the house.  Almost had one at the dance, but I was able to take him for a walk and show him the classroom I work in.  He was amazed at the fridge, washer/dryer, and kitchen set up.  Though not as amazed as he was about the small rocking chairs we had.  The thing that had him nervous was that there were ‘so many teenagers’ and they were ‘so much bigger than him’.  After pizza and sweets, he got the courage to hit the dance floor and got into.  It was when there were fewer people out there that he began making friends and showing off.  At one point, he told me he met a girl and pointed at someone with a big grin.  Made it through the whole party and now he’s in bed.  Tomorrow is a big day for him with his morning activities and then we need to start moving my stuff into the basement for the painting happening the week he’ll be with his mom . . . Well, that’s as good an opening as I can find.

Possibly the biggest drain on me is from a week long issue.  As usual, I can’t go into details, but the ex-wife and I were butting heads for most of it.  Culminated in a rough therapy session that gave me flashbacks to our marriage counseling days, which was a massive drain on my mind and body.  We have a major difference of opinion on something with my son and there’s no middle ground that we can find right now.  By the time this post goes live, I’ll have already met with her again on neutral territory and maybe things will have taken a better turn.  I unleashed a lot of what I’ve kept pent up for the last year, but I don’t think it meant anything.  All it really did was exhaust me by the end of the week and stop me from writing the last two sections of this chapter.

Oh, did have a parent/teacher conference for my son.  We’re pinpointing his strengths and weaknesses since it’s the first one of the year.  I’m seeing how his actions at home mirror what I see in the reports.  Best thing is that he tries, participates, and everyone thinks he’s a joy to have around.  I find these very important because it means he can socialize when he gets comfort.  With how he gets nervous, I worry that he can grow into a person who avoids others and that can really hurt his future.  More so than the toe-walking, head-banging, arm-flapping, and any other physical tic that people focus on.  If you can make people happy that you’re around then you’ll have friends wherever you go, which is a good life to lead.

I have no real plans for the week.  Getting things ready for painting and writing a bit whenever I can.  I’ll be doing more with my blog preparation than the novel.  Might take a night to work on a blurb for War of Nytefall: Eradication.  We’ll see how tomorrow’s ‘Volunteers Needed’ post goes.  I really hope to get people asking for specific topics, so I can get things ready and more unique.  Talk more about that tomorrow though.

Goals of the week:

  1. Get room ready for painting.
  2. A little blog work for March.
  3. Work on any volunteer requested posts.
  4. Write a chapter or two of War of Nytefall: Ravenous
  5. Read more ‘Overlord’.
  6. Finish this circular puzzle before I have to pack away the table.
  7. Remember gloves when cold in morning and umbrella when raining.
  8. Cry to bed after scheduling this post, especially since it just took me 4 tries to write ‘scheduling’ (5th try!) without screwing up.  I’m out . . . But only after writing and scheduling (YES!  First attempt nailed it!) because I’ll be awake and active once this goes live.  Later.
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Hero Motivation vs Villain Motivation

I was asked a few months back to write about the motivations of heroes and villains.  This was the be done separately, but I found the topics overlapping.  That and I thought it would work better as a comparison.  After thinking and comparing various pairings, I find that the above picture is true and so is this:

Heroes are defined by their villains.

Yes, they have individual aspects, but a hero is only as good as his or her villain.  If they are facing a bungling fool that is easily toppled then they can seem weak or overpowered.  A hero can be the underdog, but not the villain.  Otherwise, you wonder how the bad guy got so far in the first place.  This is why the motivation of antagonists should probably be designed before those of the protagonist or at least connected in some fashion.  It will be a strange story if the villain is out to steal a precious gem, but the hero is out to save the world.  Those don’t really match up unless the gem is essential to destroying the world in the first place.

I’m just going to list some tips in regards to motivation because it will always vary depending on the story.  A cattle rustler in a Western will differ to some extent from the undead dragon that has recently awaken from its crypt.  So, I’m going to try to talk in generalities instead of specifics.

  1. Even if it doesn’t start that way, the hero needs to develop a motivation that counteracts those of the villain.  They can’t keep following a path that won’t lead to conflict.  If the story ends with the hero succeeding in finding his true love while the villain has blown up the planet then you have a problem.  In fact, you may have been telling two stories at the same time by accident.
  2. Villains can possess a heroic motivation such as saving a loved one.  It’s how they go about doing it that makes them the antagonist.  A hero may travel the world to get the cure for his dying mother.  A villain may harvest organs from unsuspecting college students or rob a bank.  So, the motivation can be anything, but it’s evolved by the character’s actions.
  3. Heroes and villains can possess the same motivation if they are chasing the same thing.  It could be the throne of kingdom, a magical relic, the hand of a potential lover, or anything.  While actions can define who is who, this is where the second half of a motivation can come into play.  This would be what they plan on doing with the target of motivation after gaining it.  For example: Character A and B want the McGuffin.  Character A wants it to prevent his college from being shut down.  Character B wants it to buy a nuclear weapon and take revenge on his high school football team.  Both are motivated to get the same thing, but their motivations split when it comes to what their final goals are.
  4. Motivations can change as situations change.  In most cases, it’s the antagonist who causes this to happen or at least makes the jump faster.  Seems protagonists are commonly a few steps behind here.  A villain progressing faster can force a hero to alter their course, so this again shows how they are connected.  You can really sense how they feed each other in terms of a driving force.  Even if the hero gives less to the villain, their presence means things won’t run smoothly.  Those pesky do-gooders tend to get in the way.

As you can see, motivations are interlinked to some extent.  Personally, I believe villains guide this area of a story more than heroes.  At the very least, they give the heroes something to aim at in terms of getting stronger.  A secondary motivation to gain more powerful for either side will stem from their rivalry.  That’s another point I should make before I finish:

Characters can have more than one motivation!

They’re just like goals in that way.  We’re all driven by multiple influences in our life, so we can be motivated by more than one thing as well.

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