Immortal Wars: The Summoning Part 12 #fiction #throwback

(Previously on Immortal Wars.)

Disclaimer: Immortal Wars was the book I came up with and wrote in high school.  I hadn’t even hit college by the time I wrote the first two books.  That means I hadn’t developed my style yet, wasn’t good at self-editing, and the story was fairly basic. So, you’ve been warned that this is the ultimate author throwback segment for my blog and will show my author origins.  FYI-  I put the first book (The Summoning) through a Print-on-Demand publisher and the second one (Light, Blood, & Tears) never saw the light of day.  Enjoy!

Back at the Mandervale Mansion, Solix is busy trying to talk his way out of explaining too much to the new guardians.  So far, he has only mentioned what they are the guardians of and some things about the Sun Base.

“Answer me, Solix.  What happened to the original guardians?  If we’re the new ones then something had to have happened to the ones that you were a part of.  So tell us what happened,” orders Ed as he stands right in the face of Solix.  The others are sitting on a nearby couch trying to figure out what all of this means.

“They decided to quit.  When we exiled the evil immortals, my allies had decided to retire.  The work was getting too much for them and they wanted to leave.  I had no choice but to let them leave.  I may have lead them in battle, but I did not lead their lives,” explains Solix as beads of sweat form on his forehead.

“It doesn’t matter, Blondie.  They’re gone and we’re the ones that will get the glory.  Now, let’s just get going,” states Delila.

“I just want all of us to be careful.  We don’t have any idea what we’re getting ourselves into.  We should be careful.”

“You shouldn’t talk about being careful.  Need I remind you of the time you talked my boyfriend into sneaking onto that Air Force Base.  And also that little incident last weekend at the High School.  You were caught drinking on the roof of the High School and spent the better part of the night dodging the cops.  Now that is really being careful, Slane.”

Kelly suddenly stands up and says, “What?  You said that you went out for a midnight jog around town and that you tripped into a thornbush.  Instead, you were being chased around town by the police.”

“Calm down, Kelly.  You know that Eddie is a little bit of a misfit.  He’s done worse.  Like the time he stole the motorcycle from the gang leader.  Oops.  You didn’t know about that one.  Sorry, Ed,” says Steve.  Kelly suddenly slaps Ed across the face and gives him one of the most evil glares that he has ever seen.

“She’s probably just mad that he didn’t share the alcohol with him.  Both of you are criminals in my mind,” mentions Delila as she gets to her feet.

Kelly turns around to face Delila while the two guys shake their heads and sit down on the couch.  Solix watches to see what will happen between the women.

“I’m a criminal?  Aren’t you the one who stole my boyfriend?  You stab me, your best friend, in the back over a guy.  And he wasn’t even that good a guy.”

“He was to me. I guess you just didn’t know how to act around men.  They don’t like the tough girl that threatens people and likes to prove that whatever a guy can do, she can do even better.  He wasn’t looking for that, Tomboy.  He wanted me.”

“That’s because you’re nothing more than a filthy rich slut that wanted what everyone else had.  I can’t understand how I was ever friends with you.”  Delila walks right into Kelly’s face and spits on her forehead.  Kelly simply smiles before punching Delila in the nose and shattering it.

“How do you like that one?” asks Kelly as she grabs Delila’s red hair.  Suddenly, Delila grabs Kelly’s waist and flips the other girl over her.  Kelly lands on a glass table and the shards cut her arms.  Both of them get up and square off before they realize the wounds are starting to heal themselves.

“Enough!  Will all of you calm down and forget about what happened in your mortal lives?  Now that I have revealed the truth to you, you’re powers are starting to awaken.  We must go back to the Sun Base and start on your training,” says Solix.  Without another thought, Solix begins to teleport and takes the four teenagers with him.

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7 Tips to Working with a Serpentine Idea

Look, many of us can’t say that our original plans go off without a hitch once the pen meets the paper.  Even outlines change as you move along, so there’s a very organic undercurrent to writing in general.  Maybe it isn’t that strong with you because you have it very controlled, but there’s something at some point.  It could be the editing stage when you junk 95% of what you wrote and then act like it was all part of the plan.  That’s another version of a twisting, serpentine idea, which can be difficult to wrangle.  It can easily derail a story if you aren’t careful or flexible.  So, what are some ways to handle this potentially inevitable hurdle?

  1. Ride the wave when it strikes because it can be your subconscious showing you a connection.  This doesn’t mean to do it blindly and without holding onto the reins a bit.  If you see a cliff coming then don’t assume there’s a sea of comfy marshmallows waiting below.  It could be jagged rocks.  After all, your subconscious can be a real jerk at times.
  2. If you’re in the outline stage and an idea isn’t congealing then leave it vague.  You might know where you want the characters to end up or a special event, but not the pieces leading up to it.  By starting the story, you jog things loose and begin the path towards the shining idea.  Could be that you’re so fixated on that one spot that you aren’t looking at anything else.
  3. Do NOT think it is mandatory to junk 80-95% of your completed story.  Yes, I know many authors love to say ‘kill your babies’ or whatever when it comes to editing.  It doesn’t mean you purposely destroy everything, including the good stuff.  If you end up with a story that is nothing like the original then you might have just murdered one idea and started a new one.  Oops.
  4. Listen to your characters since their personalities will drive events.  You put a lot of work into crafting them, so they will act like an extension of your own imagination that interacts with the world/story.  They might sense something you don’t.
  5. Do NOT listen only to your characters and ignore your own voice.  Some of those voices aren’t too bright and they don’t know what’s coming down the road.
  6. You might find that you have created several paths with foreshadowing and only one of them reaches the finale.  See if you can make the failures merge with the successful one during editing runs.  Maybe they were tricks left by the villain or false assumptions made by the heroes.  They are capable of coming to the wrong conclusion if they are still trying to figure the mystery out.  This is what I did in War of Nytefall: Eradication.  Book plug successful!
  7. If you’re really unsure of hitting the dismount with an idea that is winding its way as your write then get some beta readers.  All you really need is one to read specifically for continuity and if things make sense.  Just ask them to focus on that part of the experience and admit that you aren’t sure it came out clearly.  A second opinion can do wonders.
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A Dozen Ways to Start a Story

Great list of ideas here.

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Ciao, SEers. Wow, it’s been a while since I wrote that opening. For those of you who missed me, please know I’m sorry I was away so long. I missed you. For those of you new (or new since I took a sabbatical) to the site, I’m Staci, and you’ll come to recognize my posts by me signing on this way.

Before I continue, I really need to give a shout-out to my SE partners in crime colleagues, who went above and beyond covering for me in my absence. I couldn’t ask for a better blogging family. Mae, Joan, Craig, Harmony, P.H., Marcia… many, many thanks for all the support.

Now, back to one of my favorite topics. Not my kids (though I could talk about them forever). And not my dogs (and we all know I could ramble on equally long about my furry family members). Today, third time’s…

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Working from Home Tools: Wondershare SignX

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Part of my freelance writing is signing documents like non-disclosure agreements, contracts, etc. If you regularly work from home, or if the current pandemic has you working from home, then you, too, probably communicate online with customers and co-workers. If so, you may need to have paperwork signed.

The traditional way requires couriers and the post, with all the delay and cost these bring – especially when working on another country (or continent). Alternatively, you may send documents by email so that the signees can print them, sign them, scan them, and send them back to you. Finally, you can copy and paste a scanned signature into the document.

However, things can fast become complicated. You may need here and now a signature from a co-worker who used to work in the cubicle next to yours. You may want to avoid couriers due to the epidemic. The signee may be…

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Teaser Tuesday: Battle in the Canopy #vampires #fantasy

War of Nytefall (CLICK ON IMAGE FOR AMAZON SITE)

Is this the biggest scene of War of Nytefall: Eradication?  No.  Is this a major plot point that will reveal all?  No.  Is it the last of the Teasers for a while?  Yes.  Will it be a lot of fun to read?  That’s the plan.  It’s Monster vs Monster this time.

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When an Idea Twists in Real Time

War of Nytefall: Eradication had something fairly unique among all of my published stories.  There was a big plan, but a key component of the story was trapped in a bizarre state of uncertainty.  I knew there would be a secret and who it entailed, but I couldn’t figure out what it was.  The major points of my books are typically known to me and I use them as guidelines.  It wasn’t the case here for a few reasons:

  1. I was writing the book in the midst of the divorce.  Yeah, I keep mentioning this, but it was an emotional and mental influence.  My mood wasn’t as consistent as it used to be and that made me rather fickle.
  2. There were major gaps in writing times.  I went weeks without writing at times, which meant I didn’t have the previous material clear in my head.  Tiny details weren’t remembered because they were spur of the moment at the time.  I tried to read through it all, but found that it would absorb all of my writing time and then I’d have to wait longer before I got back into it.
  3. My notes weren’t very clear on this one.  I’d tinkered with this story a lot right up to the first draft time.  So, I had pieces of various plot points in regards to this major event, but they didn’t always match.

I’m probably harder on this book than I should be since I did very careful editing to make things match the reveal I actually picked.  The memory of the ‘twisting idea’ is still fresh because I’m seeing it happen again with War of Nytefall: Ravenous.  It’s a lesser extent, but I can already tell that I have to change course on something and rethink the next volume.  This is definitely more pantser than plotter, but I’d be in terrible shape if I stayed exclusive to one school.  Creating a style that has aspects of both helps to get me over this kind of hurdle.  It only leaves me with a level of doubt and worry, but when am I not like that.  Can’t say more because it’s a big spoiler.

When it comes to twisting ideas that repeatedly jump off the rails, I think you need to step back a bit and examine.  There’s the belief that your subconscious knows better and you should follow the new path.  Yet, this is the same part of your mind that can birth paranoia and ask you what bedbugs were called before beds were invented as you try to sleep.  Not the most reliable guide.  You can take a lot from the detour because it stems from the original story, but you have to make sure that you don’t deviate so far away that everything falls apart.  The twisting idea is fun and exciting in the moment, which doesn’t always translate when a person is reading it.  They could easily wonder what you’re trying to do because they don’t see the connections.  Absorbing some of it and refining the overall combination with editing is my personal choice.

So, what do you do when an idea gets twisted from the beginning?

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Character Archetypes: The Trickster

Also, a fun one to read about. Tough one to write though.

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Hi gang, Craig with you today. This is post number five in the character archetypes series. In the Hero’s Journey, there are some common characters that are likely to show up in all stories. This doesn’t mean each archetype shows up in every story, and aside from the hero, the rest are kind of optional. Almost every story will have an assortment of them.

This series is to introduce you to them. Once you’re aware of them, you can decide if they can benefit the story you’re writing.

I have to say, this is the most maddening one to write about so far. Almost seems poetic when you consider it’s about The Trickster. There are as many different opinions about this archetype as there are websites, so I’m going to reject their reality and substitute my own. This is all in an attempt to offer some help, which is what…

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How Ya’ll Doin’?

Honestly, that’s really it.  This has been a crazy week and the next one isn’t looking to be any better.  I told my story yesterday.  Curious to know how all my blog peeps are holding up in the face of a global pandemic and life changing as we know it.  At least for the foreseeable future.

So, how’s everyone doing?

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Week 1 of Containment: I Really Hope this is Saturday

Seriously, all of the days have blurred together with everything that happened.  I don’t have to tell all of you about what’s going on.  We’ve all been affected.  I’m still nervous because every map I look at has me sitting in a big red zone.  In New York, the worst areas are NYC, Westchester, and Long Island.  Hello from, Long Island!

I’ve been texting with coworkers to keep up-to-date on various situations and see if we can still help our students.  This has been fairly easier than everything else.  Nothing to even report on there because it’s private.  I’m fighting to stay optimistic that they’ll be fine and we’ll all be back in our classroom by April 1st.  Is it weird that April Fools Day is when we’re aiming to head back to school?  Betting some short-sighted person is going to pull a prank about having the coronavirus.

Let’s get to the main event here . . . My son.  He’s basically being homeschooled by me and that’s rather difficult.  Most of the week was doing worksheets and exercises then he played with the neighbor kids.  The real stuff kicked in on Thursday and Friday . . . which is when the fighting started.  Not with him, but my ex-wife was sent home as well.  So, we had to split the week, but we both had different ideas and thoughts on the situation.  The fight was pretty nasty for a bit and I’ll admit that I’m still stung on a few things that were said in my direction.  This is probably venting more than I should, but it isn’t like her or anyone she knows checks my blog.  The two of us are stubborn and don’t see eye-to-eye, which is why these battles happen.  Guess our hearts are in the right place while our egos and minds aren’t.  In the end, my son and I came up with a fair split.

To be honest, it is really hard to have him somewhere else during this time.  I worry about him all the time.  Eh, this is probably not a good topic.

In the writing front, I did manage to get somewhere.  Surprisingly, I should be finishing War of Nytefall: Ravenous by the end of today.  Just got the closing chapter to do after yesterday’s chase and battles. Tomorrow will be working on the outline for War of Nytefall: Savagery and I’m going to start it next Friday.  I might as well take advantage of the home stuff.  If my son goes out to play with the kids then I may even get the fantasy tip book information finished up.  Was there a title for that one?  So, You Wanna Write Fantasy? That one really does seem too aggressive and patronizing, which doesn’t work for me.  Ugh, I hate this stumbling block.  Anybody got a muse I can borrow?

In other arenas, I’ve been catching up on some anime.  I finished ‘Castlevania’ Season 3 and loved it.  Definitely a bridge season, but I liked the suspense and twists.  Didn’t enjoy Alucard’s story, but it was fairly minor.  I got through Season 4 of ‘Hunter x Hunter’ as well, which means I’ve watched more than I’ve read.  Began working my way through ‘Overlord’, which is an odd one.  The protagonists are overpowered, so there isn’t much of a risk of them losing.  I’m going to see it through to the end because it’s got good world-building.  After that, I’m either going to jump to ‘Jojo’s Bizarre Adventure’ Season 2 or ‘Ranma 1/2’.  I’m enjoying the manga for the latter.  Yeah, I’m watching more anime than anything else.  Just in that kind of mood for a while.

I wish I had more to report.  Though, I will say:

War of Nytefall: Eradication
Still available on Amazon!

Only the free book is moving.  No sales.  I see authors trying to use the quarantine to their advantage on social media.  Not feeling that because of what’s going on with my own containment.  I know I’d be annoyed by such marketing, so why bother doing it to other people?

Full disclosure:  I’ve been drinking while writing this.  So, I’m going to call it a night and go back to my anime.

Goals for the week?

  1. Finish War of Nytefall: Ravenous
  2. Homeschool my son.
  3. Play time with my son.
  4. Keep up with work events.
  5. Outline and begin War of Nytefall: Savagery.
  6. Tinker with fantasy tip book.
  7. Toss up a few June blog posts.
  8. Watch more ‘Overlord’.
  9. Get pizza at some point because I miss it so.
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Types of Spying in War of Nytefall

D&D Spy?  (That’s what the site said anyway)

Now, this may be a better topic for War of Nytefall: Ravenous, but I felt like I couldn’t risk forgetting it.  Spying and gathering intelligence is still very important in Eradication, especially when you see one of the big moves that Leo Kandrel makes.  In fact, the Dawn Fangs and their enemies have come to see that gathering information is more important than battles.  This is where the real struggle comes from since many events come down to who knows what and who learns of things first.  The side that pinpoints the location of the Fist of Durag could very well turn the tide of the slow-moving war.

Now, I’ve noticed about 6 types of spying that goes on in War of Nytefall.  It’s actually 3 to each side.  There is a 7th that I can’t talk about though because of spoilers.  Let’s leave that one alone and dive right into the methods.

Nyte: Kai Stavros the Spymaster

I would say that Kai is a more traditional spy as long as we’re not talking about the kind that blow up half a city before lunch.  He oversees a global network of agents and contacts that he communicates with through various methods.  Some are magical like portals while others are mundane like messenger birds.  He’s had centuries to hone his skills to the point where there is very little that he doesn’t know.  Kai is the type of spy who tries to stay out of the action and will only get involved if he doesn’t have a choice.  He’s more likely to report what happens than change the ensuing events.  Kai also manipulates others to get the results that he feels are best for his master, Lord Tempest.  For example, he gets the vampire hunters involved in the hunt for Leo Kandrel in order to hide the fact that Nyte was on the move while the truce was still in play.  Everything about him is low key and subtle.

Nytefall: Chastity Sullivan the Gatherer

Chastity is similar to Kai in that she is responsible for a global network, but it is more contacts than agents.  While he operates for a political group (Lord and Lady of Nyte), Chastity created her system to be used by criminals.  Her operation was started when Clyde ran his gang and long before the Great Cataclysm.  She uses her businesses to help spread her influence and make contacts that she can get information from along with supplies.  The biggest difference between her and Kai is that she gets involved with her seduction and manipulations.  She would be more of a femme fatale than a figure lurking int he shadows of a room.  Her charm magic is what makes this possible as well as her lack of inhibitions.

Nyte: Stephanie Talon the Ritualist

Here we start in on the more intrusive and magical methods of spying in War of Nytefall.  Stephanie can get information that Kai is unable to find by using her blood rituals to scry.  This has both advantages and disadvantages.  It is a one-person operation, which means fewer ears and mouths are passing things on.  Scrying can be done from the safety of a castle instead of getting close to the target.  You don’t have to worry about getting attacked too.  Unfortunately, Stephanie does have to be careful about wards, backlash spells, and other magical methods of defense.  People know scrying is possible, so they defend themselves if they are doing something in secret.  Scrying can also be less reliable in that you may only get visual or sound, but not both if the distance or ritual is imprecise.  There’s a time issue too because Stephanie’s method may show here what is about to happen or what has already come to pass, but she won’t be sure of which situation it is.  This is why she usually works best alongside Kai’s network.

Nytefall: Lost the Psychic

Not much to really say here because we can all figure this one out.  Lost has telepathy and the ability to mindjack others.  This means, she can take over a guard in the room to spy on a meeting.  She can also read thoughts from far distances, but this has the problem of her not always knowing who she is spying on.  Without a visual of the person, she might not know what they look like unless they happen to have a mirror nearby.  This type of spying gets you the best purity of information, but it is highly intrusive and going too deep will reveal that you’ve been there.  Unlike the previous methods, this one can inadvertently cause a target to become aware of the spy and they’ll change plans.  Lost wouldn’t know that her information is already obsolete in this situation.

Nyte: Lady Sylvan’s Swarm

I can use Xavier Tempest too since he can change his shape, but I find this one to be a little more interesting.  As a swarm, Nadia can be in an area and observe things.  She doesn’t do this often because she’s a noble, but it is an option.  Even if someone sees the swarm, they won’t think much of it since she can spread out or keep most of them hidden nearby.  If discovered or attacked, she can still survive with all of the information because only one bug needs to live for her to make it out.  Another advantage of this method is that it’s fairly unique to Lady Sylvan . . . Much like the final spying method.

Nytefall: Mab the Dark Mistress

Seriously, she can move through shadows and has learned to put only part of herself in or out of the void.  All Mab has to do is locate the person or place that she wants to spy on and then stick her ear into the area.  This does mean that she won’t be able to see much because of how she has to turn her head.  A risk is if someone sees the phantom body part since it would be pretty obvious what is going on.  Especially if they try to kick it and find that it’s still attached to something in the shadows.

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