This one might be quicker than the rest because I can’t think of any clear examples. It mostly stems from a few responses I’ve gotten about my books and discussions I have had about heroes. It seems there are readers who want a character who is tough, noble, brave, and has no qualms about killing people. The slightest transgression results in this hero attacking and then they go back to claiming to be pure or noble. Not even because that is their persona, but they’re written that way. This is different from the Antihero because those tend to either be conscious of their hypocrisy or never claimed to be noble. The Psycho Hero is different too because they’re established as violent and enjoy the chaos that they cause.
So this list might be more about how to avoid writing a noble hero who can’t hold onto his/her own morality. Again, not that they’re tricked or pushed to go against their code, but they do it without question or even realizing it.
- If your hero talks about how life is precious then make them show grief about killing. It brings more weight to their beliefs and creates consistency. Otherwise, you think the author isn’t paying attention to what they’re doing.
- Create an honor code for a noble character even if you don’t explain it in the book. You should also STICK TO THE HONOR CODE! If your character says ‘I don’t fight women’ then don’t have them throw down with a female warrior in the next chapter. If she’s disguised and her gender is revealed then this hero should suddenly go on the defensive and try to get out of the fight. Suddenly adding, ‘unless she fights me first’ is a cop out and can only be done within the same scene. Otherwise, people might think the author hasn’t read their own book.
- If you do have a character who counters his own moral code then have other characters call him out on it. Don’t just have the other heroes shrug and ignore the fact that a Paladin of the Magic Goddess just set fire to an ancient magical tapestry. In that specific case, the Magic Goddess might want to revoke his status since those types of deities are all about preserving magic. In other words, don’t let the other characters give these inconsistent jerks a pass. Otherwise, people might think they’re just as stupid as the badly written hero.
- Remember that there are laws in a world that isn’t plunged into anarchy or simply a wilderness region. This means that killing is still illegal. There is leeway that can be made, but you need to be careful. Even if a hero murders the pickpocket that tried to rob him, there still needs to be some explanation to the guard or someone telling the reader that this is okay. Also, if the hero butchers a person for spilling his or her drink and is not arrested then it’s strange when any other characters are punished or hated for violent crimes. So keep the meaningless violence to a minimum or with explanation if you MUST use it. Otherwise, people will think the world is shoddy and the author merely wants to satisfy a blood lust.
Anybody think of any other tips to avoid a Hypocritical Hero?











