You’re Only Making Things Worse: Cascading Problems

War of Nytefall: Ravenous isn’t the first time I’ve had a character make bad choice after bad choice.  In fact, I enjoy having my heroes and villains think they are doing the right thing and it ends up being a disaster.  Luke Callindor was practically the king of wrong moves in Legends of Windemere.  This time, we have a few characters who make a big decision that blows up in their face.  There are two ways that this can be handled by them:

  • Taking a step back and thinking of a way to undo the damage.  This is the response that we all imagine we possess under pressure.  It is what we expect all of our characters to do as well if they ever make a wrong choice.  Step on the wrong?  Well, you just have to go backwards and we’re all good.  Yeah . . . Just that simple.
  • The character panics and tries to make a quick fix, but this results in making things worse.  They react again to repair one part of the damage, but it ends up making a mess in another area.  Repeat because your head is spinning.  You take a step back and try to think of a plan, but you don’t have the time and resources to make a clean fix.  Just do what you can and soak up whatever damage you can’t erase.  With any luck, you’ll walk about with all of your parts intact and able to rest for a minute.

Would you be surprised to know that the second option is the more realistic one?  We all admire those who can make a mistake and fix it quickly, but we probably know more people who create an avalanche of wrong turns.  They get out of it eventually, but there’s a period of arm flailing and panic.  A reason for this is that we get tunnel vision when an unexpected problem arises.  Our instinct is to handle the immediate threat and we don’t always remember to think ahead.  It’s like being focused on cleaning a floor and then finding yourself trapped in a corner until things dry.  You were so focused on the task at hand that you failed to notice the disaster looming.

In fiction, we tend to expect better from our characters.  Even those who want flaws in their heroes may get frustrated when they see mistakes being made.  That’s because a reader is sitting back and knows more about the situation than the character.  They are also able to keep a clear mind since they aren’t in the thick of it.  You ever yell at characters in a horror movie for going into the scary basement to check things out?  It’s because you know you’re watching a horror movie and aren’t in danger.  The characters aren’t stupid, but unaware of their situation or too scared to think clearly.  Besides, how many of us have had a power outage at night and gone into the basement or wherever to check the circuit breakers?  How do you know there isn’t a monster or serial killer waiting for you to do just that?  (I am so sorry if anybody is now scared to go into their basement.  I recommend running down there shrieking like a banshee and swinging a rolling pin around.  Be crazier than the things that want to eat you.)

Personally, I think it is very believable for a character to make so many mistakes and still come out victorious.  If anything, this gives us hope that we can get out of any hole that we find ourselves in.  Sure, we might have bumps, bruises, scars, and that knee won’t ever bend the right way again.  Yet, we still reach our goal and, hopefully, we learn from our mistakes.  That’s what we try to teach our children, but I’ve met many adults that forget this and are terrified of the slightest misstep.  That fear can be paralyzing and lead to the domino effect of mistakes, which is what we really should see characters do.  At some point, they will have to put a hand out and stop a domino from hitting its neighbor to begin moving forward again.  In many ways, that is life and shows us that we are always learning.

Getting back to War of Nytefall: Ravenousthis cascading avalanche of disaster happens a few times.  I was tempted to remove or minimize it, but the story really works as you watch the characters in question make one wrong move after another.  The one that thinks they’re in control and gets more desperate as events continue forward was my favorite to write.  They are constantly swearing that they are in control while stuff falls apart around them and they have to implement a new plan.  I had several points where I wanted to have them just stop the disaster and move on, but that never felt natural given the emotions and mindsets involved.  Again, that’s reality.  People get stuck in self-destructive spirals all the time.  Now, do the characters ever realize that they are the cause of their own headaches?  Well, you’ll have to read to find that out.

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Immortal Wars: The Summoning Part 34 #fiction #throwback

(Previously on Immortal Wars.)

(Again, we shall revel in my teenage originality.  Everyone groan in unison.)

Disclaimer: Immortal Wars was the book I came up with and wrote in high school.  I hadn’t even hit college by the time I wrote the first two books.  That means I hadn’t developed my style yet, wasn’t good at self-editing, and the story was fairly basic. So, you’ve been warned that this is the ultimate author throwback segment for my blog and will show my author origins.  FYI-  I put the first book (The Summoning) through a Print-on-Demand publisher and the second one (Light, Blood, & Tears) never saw the light of day.  Enjoy!

Outside is a naturally formed arena that has Adriana’s dragon throne positioned in front of it.  Pointy rocks that form a distorted circle, which is about twenty feet across in every direction, make up the outskirts of the arena.  The inside is a flat area with a few obvious dips in the ground here and there.  Kilanus is already sitting cross-legged in the middle of the arena with her eyes closed.  The only people missing when Adriana arrives is Tegam and Draveon.

“Should have known that someone would be late.  Where’s Tegam and Draveon?” she asks when she sits down.

“Draveon wanted to finish something up first.  He said that he’ll arrive as soon as he can.  And as you can hear, I’m right next to you.  Nobody beside you and Startrix know that I am hiding here and let’s keep it that way,” whispers Tegam, who is invisible near her throne somewhere.

“Let’s start this!” exclaims Psylon.  She starts walking towards Kilanus until Startrix gets in her way.  A sizzling arrow is aimed at Psylon’s throat and the silver longbow glows in the armored immortal’s hands.

“Hold on.  Let’s go over the rules.  This is to either submission or knockout.  There is no killing to be committed in this event.  Unless it is done by my daughter considering she’s the only one that can bring you back.  All of you cannot use the guardian weapons, so you must use all physical and supernatural abilities that you were born with.  The order is Psylon, Hellax, Cybro, Mindtrigger, and Draveon.  That is if the oversized muscle shows up.  Begin.”

“Finally.  I owe you, pipsqueak,” growls Psylon.  She runs at the stationary Kilanus, who is still sitting with her eyes closed.  Psylon grins as she hurls a fireball at the girl.  There is a small explosion and when the smoke clears there is nothing but a burn mark.

“Oops.”  Psylon starts laughing until she notices everyone looking up.  When she looks up, she sees a black boot smash down on her face.  Kilanus nimbly lands on her feet and runs at the redhead.  Another fireball shoots past her as she slides under it and sweeps Psylon’s legs out from underneath her.

“Here’s a new word for you, Psylon.  Aim,” whispers Kilanus.  She picks the other woman up by her neck and tosses her across the arena.  Psylon lands headfirst against the armored back of a large, black-scaled lizard.  It just snorts before looking down at the groaning form next to it.  The massive creature just continues walking off while Psylon stays down cursing at nothing in particular.

“Next victim.”  Kilanus points at Hellax and beckons him with her finger.  The armored man walks toward her.  He throws a punch at her and she simply sidesteps it.  She kicks him in the gut, which sends him flipping into the air.

Hellax lands on his head while he says, “What do I do now?”

“Just leave.  I don’t want you to waste my time.”  The blond effortlessly punts the gold-armored warrior up into the unfinished tower.  As soon as he’s gone, Cybro begins shooting at her.  One of the lasers passes through Kilanus’ left shoulder before she has time to start dodging the rapid shots.  Cybro manages to keep her far away and get some shots in before he runs out of ammunition.  The lasers make a sad sparking noise whenever he tries to use them.

“Ouch.  That hurt.  At least you were a little more of a challenge,” announces Kilanus.  She flings herself into Cybro and knocks him onto his back.  She grabs his head for a knee strike, but the thing comes off in her hands.

“Does this count as a win for me?”  The rest of the body suddenly punches her in the face and reattaches the head.

“Do not act so confident.  There is always someone better.  Now fight,” says the angry cyborg.  He hits Kilanus with a taser prong in his foot and starts electrocuting her with a flurry of kicks.  Surprisingly, she keeps walking towards him and manages to get her hands on him.  His circuits are fried from the high voltage going through her and the electricity also sets off his jet boosters.  The robot goes flying off into a nearby boulder and is forced to try and pull himself back together.

“That’s it.  I’m not going through with this.  She’s already proven herself, Adriana.  Besides, I’m a scientist and not a savage warrior like the others.  I say that we end it!” shouts Mindtrigger.

“I agree.  Good job, Kilanus.  I’m sorry it wasn’t as much a challenge as you had hoped for, but the others want to concentrate of the battle with the guardians.  Let’s go celebrate in the dining hall,” says Adriana as she gets up from the throne.  Mindtrigger walks off and Kilanus is about to leave the arena when Draveon arrives.

“It seems far too early to celebrate your daughter’s success.  Besides, there is still a challenge that the young warrior has to defeat.  And that’s me,” he says.  Without any warning, he shoulder rushes Kilanus.  She manages to cushion the impact with her forearms and cautiously lands on all fours.  Draveon tries to smash her down into the ground with an elbow drop, but she rolls out of the way with lightning speed.

“The rules said not to kill anyone!  So stop trying to kill me!” yells Kilanus as she jumps over another charge.  She turns around and kicks Draveon in the back a few times before he turns around.  When he does, she jumps up and wraps her legs around his head.  They grip his skull like flexible steel as he stumbles blindly around.  She throws herself backwards and slams him into the ground as hard as she can.

“Battle is death.  There is no avoiding it.  This is to show you what combat really is.  So this means you could die.  Sorry.  But that’s how our world works, little one.  You are no longer a child for me to protect.  You are a warrior that is either fighting by my side or lying dead on the battlefield.”  The muscular man grabs her by the leg and starts pounding her into the ground like she was a sledgehammer.

“Bite me, big boy.”  Kilanus kicks herself free and let’s loose with an extremely loud roar, which sounds like a combination of a dinosaur and a lion.  She charges at him and dodges all of his slow punches.

In between growls of anger, Kilanus starts shouting; “There is only one reason you can’t beat me, Draveon.  And that’s because I’m faster.  You can’t hit what you can’t catch, loser.  So this is over.”  She starts punching and kicking Draveon all over the place and she makes every one of her moves melt into the next like liquid.  One move ends just as another begins so that she never has to stop.

“That’s all that you’ve got, Kilanus.  I’m disappointed.”  Suddenly Draveon feels himself get lighter as Kilanus lifts him above her head.  She takes a running start toward the unfinished tower and manages to leap up the side of the infrastructure with Draveon in her hands.  She has his arms pinned to his sides and keeps spinning him so that he can’t get his bearings.

“Give me one reason that I shouldn’t destroy you right now,” whispers the blond immortal.  Draveon spits on her head before she launches herself into the air.  On the way down, she flips Draveon underneath her, so he takes most of the deadly impact.  They land in the middle of the arena, but they go straight through the surface of the planet for about twenty-seven feet.  A minute later, Kilanus drags herself out while carrying the bloody body of Draveon.

“Kilanus?  Are you ok?” asks Adriana as she runs over to her daughter.

“Yeah, mom.  I’m fine.  Draveon’s kind of dead right now.  Sorry about that.  But the bastard deserved it.  Can we go eat now?  I’m hungry,” replies Kilanus.  She strides off toward the warship with a slight limp and is obviously nursing a broken arm.

“Kilanus!  Bring him back!”

The teenager turns around and simply states, “I will.  When I’m ready and after I’ve eaten.  As long a decade has not passed since he died, I can bring him back.  Now, I want food.”  With that she just walks away to heal and get some food.

“What are you thinking, Adriana?” inquires Startrix as the two women look down at Draveon’s body.  His limbs are mangled and a look of closed-eyed shock is on his face.

“I can’t believe I gave birth to something with so much power.  I’m so glad that she’s on our side.  Or else we’d probably be dead before we knew it.”

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Fading into the Background: Characters and Spotlights

This is a big challenge when it comes to ensemble cast stories.  Yes, there are those that take the reins of the story and others that float into supporting cast.  Yet, each player is important to the overall story.  Unfortunately, you can’t have them be in the spotlight for every volume.  That could result in 20 plots competing for attention if everyone has their own journey.  At best, you can put them into groups of 2 and 3 to give them more time in scenes, but that’s not perfect.  War of Nytefall: Ravenous ran into this problem and the next volume has it as well.  Is this really a bad thing?

For those who love the characters that take a step back, it will be a disaster.  Their favorites aren’t getting the attention they deserve.  Doesn’t matter that they already had at least one volume where they got to shine.  Anger might be aimed at the characters that maintain their status because they have claimed the ‘main’ cast moniker.  You hope this isn’t the case, but people are funny and unpredictable.  Some can turn on a series if you don’t cater to their whims, which you can’t avoid.  There’s a reason characters are rotating in and out of the spotlight over the course of a series.  It helps to keep things fresh and opens for more stories. People don’t always realize that characters may have a specialty instead of being a Jack-of-all-Trades.  This means that there are adventures when they aren’t going to be as useful.

Aside from keeping a series fresh and moving, you get another big benefit.  These characters that are stepping out of their limited roles can be flushed out and gain their own fan-bases.  My goal is always to create a variety of characters, so that readers can connect to at least one of them.  There’s no rule that you can’t have multiple favorites or switch to a new one.  Kai Stavros was a minor character to me until Eradication and now he has a really interesting story arch that will go on for a bit.  Decker is getting some attention in Ravenous and I’m enjoying doing that.  From the hero side, Titus and Bob get to shine a bit more.  They’ve really been in the shadow of Lost, Mab, and Clyde for much of the series.  It’s a more difficult balancing act than with Legends of Windemere because I have a bigger cast and no ‘destiny’ storyline.

I’m laying the groundwork for bigger jumps in this volume because I need a lot of heavy hitters for the finale.  That is the ultimate goal for an ensemble series.  By the end, you want every character to have changed in some respect.  If they were around for everything and remain the same then you missed an opportunity.  That or they’re really a statue and you never realized another character was lugging the thing around.  By the end of even a small series, you need your heroes and villains to be at the final stages of their journey.  If you had to phase them in and out of importance throughout the volumes then that shows you gave them the proper amount of attention.  As an author, we do need to focus on only a handful of plots or we end up with a muddled mess.  At best, we get a book that is thousands of pages long in order to cover everyone from the protagonist to the antagonist to the janitor who cleans up after the battle in chapter 4.  Poor guy wasn’t even supposed to be at work that day.

My point here is that you have to pick and choose when and where to progress with a character.  It’s a challenge because we have our own favorites.  It’s hard to push Lost into the background because I enjoy writing her, but Desirae sure as hell wasn’t going to let that loose cannon run around for long.  I guess you can make your choices depending on the actions of the villain too.  Who would they target or who would be the best choices to get in their way?  It depends on the story.  This is a personal balancing act that I could continue writing about for hours.  Yet, in the end, it comes down to what the author wants and the story needs.

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Welcome John Howell #NewBook

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Let’s all welcome John Howell to the blog today. John is a fabulous author, one of my fellows over at Story Empire, and one of my first blogging friends. John has always been a big supporter of the indie community, including my work. Let’s make him feel welcome by using those sharing buttons. If you’ve even had your work featured here, John did it for you. Welcome John:

New Book Launch – Eternal Road – The final stop.

Thank you so much for having me on your blog, Craig, and thank you for helping me launch this book. You have a unique and fun storytelling style and I am grateful to be here. Speaking of the book, let me describe it. Eternal Road is the story of two people finding their way through the selection process leading to the place where one will spend eternity. Yes, it is true. They…

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Teaser Tuesday: Not a Great Start #fantasy #vampires

Cover Art by Alison Hunt

It wouldn’t be a series of teasers for War of Nytefall: Ravenous without the Vengeance Hounds making an appearance.  I had to change one thing here to block a spoiler, but some people might figure it out.  No action here, but you get the fun of the usual banter, which always makes me chuckle

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Today I am at Marcia Meara’s Beautiful Place Talking about Eternal Road -The final stop.

Marcia is doing the kick off hosting duty for the Eternal Home – The final stop blog tour. Here is a link to the post this morning. I hope you will …

Today I am at Marcia Meara’s Beautiful Place Talking about Eternal Road -The final stop.
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When Gore Is Required: Need a Washcloth?

I’ve had a few posts on gore thanks to War of Nytefall.  It’s not surprising since we’re talking about vampires here.  Limbs and heads have been removed. Bodies cut into various pieces with the mention of blood.  A few mentions of guts when an organ gets removed or damaged then regenerates.  In my opinion, it’s been fairly tame, but you never now how people will react.  I had people dislike the violence and gore in Bedlam, so it’s best to cover bases.

So, why would I be bringing this up again?  Well, Ravenous has a gore-dependency in it, but not in the way you would think.  There aren’t bodies getting shredded every few pages or blood getting splattered around for shock value.  It all revolves around Desirae Duvall’s main power, which is at the core of the story.  This isn’t a neat and tidy ability, so having her use it requires a lot of yuck.  I try to minimize it as much as I can, but there is only so much that I can do.  Honestly, it’s probably milder than I realize, but we’re back in that ‘you never know’ category.  Since there’s no way for me to have this character and story without the gore, it has to stay.

Of course, this brings up a question.  Over the years, gore has been used primarily for shock value and gross outs.  There hasn’t been any real story use to it when you look at mainstream.  It can be done to create a rather visceral reaction of hate, anger, fear, or disgust.  For example, a TV series where characters are routinely killed in grotesque fashion can get fans to react in certain ways thanks to the gore.  Yet, this is still shock value and loses its impact after a while.  Not only for that series, but for everyone else because the audience goes ‘seen one intestine lasso battle, seen them all’.  This means gore in general loses its ability and only those who are easily flustered by it will be having a real reaction.  So, is there another use for gore besides the commonly used shock value?

My personal opinion is that you can use it for story if done in a certain way.  Anything that deals with cutting people open either legally or illegally will have a level of gore.  If you’re going to write a story from the perspective of a doctor or a serial killer then you may need to point out some gross parts.  It doesn’t have to be extremely detailed, but the blood and guts can be seen as a necessary aspect.  Maybe the gore is what drives a character to act or think a certain way.  Using it sparingly will increase its effectiveness in the story, but you still have to be careful about utilizing it solely for shocking people.  It’s easy to prepare someone for what they’re about to see here.  With Desirae, I made it a shock once or twice when she used her powers early on, but after that was at least one action that warned people what was coming.  You can point out that a surgeon is putting his scalpel against the skin, which acts as a warning. The serial killer can brandish the knife and get closer, so a reader prepares for it.  These help move the story along, establish parts of a character/world, and doesn’t rely on shock.

Now, gore isn’t for everyone and you can find ways around it.  Heck, I do that when it comes to sex scenes.  You know it happens and see the aftermath, so you can always go the route of a character describing what they saw.  So, I can’t really say that gore is a necessity in anything.

So, what do you think about gore and if it has any uses beyond shocking people?

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Binge-Worthy Book Festival Final Day!

The last day only means it’s the last chance to check out the authors and books!  Only one day left to enter the contests!  Hope everyone who ventured over enjoyed the fun!

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Check This Out: Nacho’s Nachos: The Story Behind the World’s Favorite Snack

L. Marie's avatarEl Space--The Blog of L. Marie

I love featuring books on the blog, especially books written by my friends. And I couldn’t be more pleased to welcome to this space my friend and fellow Secret Gardener, the awesome Sandra Nickel, who is here to chat about her fabulous picture book, Nacho’s Nachos: The Story Behind the World’s Favorite Snack. It was published by Lee & Low Books on August 11 and illustrated by Oliver Dominguez.

   

Sandra is represented by Victoria Wells Arms. Let’s give it up for Sandra! (There will be a book giveaway at the end of the post, in case you wondered. 😁)

El Space: Four quick facts about yourself?
Sandra:
1. I adore writing picture books, absolutely adore it!
2. I grew up in a small town and still live in a small town—except the small town I live in now is in Switzerland.
3. I’ve been a colossal…

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To Pre-Order or Not – That is the Question. A Look at the Benefits of Pre-Order.

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Hi SEers. John, with you today. I would like to continue the discussion that I started last time.  (you can view it HERE) As you will recall (or not), I discussed some research I did on preorders on Amazon. I came to the conclusion that preorders unless you are a famous author, pretty much work against the idea of Amazon deeming a book worthy of promotion. That is because Amazon only promotes books that show steady sales and not peaks and valleys.

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Today I would like to point out the benefits of running a preorder.

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After all, like the sign implies, not everything in life is directed to the purpose of getting recognized by Amazon. There are several benefits of pre-order, so let’s dive in and cover them.

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Benefit One – Author sanity. When you set your book up for a preorder you…

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