Narrator 1– This is the bad guy. You can tell because he’s leading an army of soldiers in black armor.
Narrator 2– Don’ t be ridiculous. Armor color doesn’t mean evil. Besides, he’s leading a charge against the descendants of those who murdered his family. The man simply wants to reclaim his homeland.
Narrator 1– It’s been a few hundred years. Stop living in the past. The current rulers shouldn’t be punished for their ancestors actions.
Narrator 2– They are benefitting from it.
Narrator 1– That doesn’t mean you lead an army to kill them and destroy everything in your path.
Narrator 2– Those villages have sworn allegiance to the false rulers. They refused to dissolve their oath of loyalty and join him. Do you think it’s a smart idea to leave enemies at your rear?
Narrator 1– Why would they agree to join that guy? The legends say that his family had ruled the land through fear and torture. They wouldn’t want that type of system to return even if they did believe the guy. He has no proof that he’s a descendant of the first set of rulers.
Narrator 2– He has more proof than your destined hero. Nobody was around when that talking cow told the kid that he was going to save the kingdom. Let the audience know that the kid was sneaking cups of alcohol before that encounter.
Narrator 1– What are you talking about? That never happened.
Narrator 2– It is now because I’m adding it in.
Narrator 1– You can’t just add history like that to my characters. Stay in your lane and handle this like a mature author.
Narrator 2– The female lead is going to fall in love with the ‘bad guy’ and realize that she has been lied to. She’s going to betray the hero for the sake of the kingdom.
Narrator 1– They were childhood friends and have a telepathic link. How is that going to work without him turning to?
Narrator 2– Then they’ll both join the villain.
Narrator 1– I think you’ve effectively ruined the story. This is why you can’t have two narrators working at the same time.
Narrator 2– The current king eats babies.
Narrator 1– That’s it! *sound of a laptop bouncing off a human skull* It’s worth the repair bill.
Succinctly demonstrated, Charles 😂
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Very creative, Charles. I think the point was well made.
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Reblogged this on Jeanne Owens, author.
Thanks for sharing.
You’re welcome 🙂