Brewing Idea: Lions of Trune

Underwater City by Anez Erynlis (Found in Yahoo Image Search)

Underwater City by Anez Erynlis (Found in Yahoo Image Search)

I came up with an idea that has been rattling around my head.  I’m still not sure exactly where to go with this, but here is what I have.

A group of friends (4 boys and 1 girl) live in a city that is hidden under a cliffside named Trune.  Their people struggle to survive in the catacombs, so these friends decide to head into the world for training.  They agree to return in 10 years and become a mercenary team to bring some income into their hidden city.  Their headquarters is a building on the cliff with a secret entrance to the city.  This is all setting and motivation for their beginning adventure.

The issue comes when they regather.  The boys train as a paladin, an assassin, a potion master, and a forest tracker.  The girl was training as a warrior until she was taken into an organization that promised her unique skills.  Instead, they magically altered her in their experiments to create the perfect warrior race.  The forest tracker broke her out before they were done, so now she is a skilled warrior who wanders from child-like nature to raging psychotic.  She’ll spout random stuff at times, but she’s still a functional and not over the top level of crazy.

The main plot revolves around the organization trying to recapture her once they find out where she is.  This is where I get lost.  Part of me wants to do a trilogy that has them do a mission in the first book, battle the organization and lose in the second, and go in for revenge in the third.  Yet, I think I can do this in a single book too.  It could very well be the sequence of mission, organization problems, attack on Trune, and then an assault on the organization.  I had some villains in the form of two completed female perfect warriors, one male perfect warrior, and the head of the organization.  A lot of the story would revolve around the bonds between the heroes and how far they’ll go to protect their those they care about.

I’d be happy to hear any insight somebody has to this.  The more I think about it, the more I worry that it might be an overdone idea.

About Charles Yallowitz

Charles E. Yallowitz was born, raised, and educated in New York. Then he spent a few years in Florida, realized his fear of alligators, and moved back to the Empire State. When he isn't working hard on his epic fantasy stories, Charles can be found cooking or going on whatever adventure his son has planned for the day. 'Legends of Windemere' is his first series, but it certainly won't be his last.
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35 Responses to Brewing Idea: Lions of Trune

  1. Kaufman's Kavalkade says:

    Go for it.

    Tales of adventuring bands are cool. And you will have your own unique spin I am sure.


  2. Wanderer says:

    I’m in a similar situation with a story I’m working on. I even came up with (if I do say so myself) dang good names for all three parts/books–which is very rare for me. I think, to avoid disappointment, I’m going to consider them three parts of one novel and if I write enough that I can split it up, it will be a peasant surprise! Good luck—sounds like a very interesting concept!


  3. ioniamartin says:

    I feel sorry for your paladin already

    Sent from an island in the sun


  4. renxkyoko says:

    perfect. I hope there’s some romance in it, too. ^_^


  5. Oloriel says:

    I loved your idea, but I think this would look better in a single book, other then in three parts.


  6. some great ideas, charles. Personally, I think it would work better as a trilogy (using the recipe you suggested, with the intro/training etc, losing, revenge – tried and proven) as it sounds complicated for one endeavour but plenty of adventure for a longer piece. I appreciate others (friends and trusted/talented writers among them) think one book would be ample, this is just my oppinion. Just say shut up, baldy and I’ll go hohowhat! Ten years of absence from each other allows a lot to happen in their world, there is scope for a great deal of storytelling here, I’ll be interested to know what you decide and how your story goes if you decide to pursue it. Keep smiling and keep writing, pal 🙂


    • Thanks. I think it’s going to depend on how long the overall plot is. I wasn’t going to write their training because that’s not much of a story. They part ways in the prologue and the first chapter has them in mid-mission or regrouping. This is all off the topic of my head. I’ll have to play it all by ear.


  7. I think a single book would please the readers more, but if the story gets really fat you many want to consider the three. I like the idea of the three parts though. Maybe Luke can be the Obi Won of Forest Trackers.


  8. tjtherien says:

    it’s an interesting concept to develop and I look forward to seeing what you come up with… side note I’m almost done reading Beginnings… I am enjoying it so far…


  9. Sahm King says:

    I like the idea. I don’t see what’s overdone about it, but like you said, it does sound like it could be done in one book. Of course, who knows what your characters will decide?


  10. Gwen Bristol says:

    I really like this idea. And I would love to read it, when you’ve written it. Best wishes!


  11. justmoo33 says:

    There is, of course, the sweet moment when your latest review is a big thumbs up AND they say they can’t wait for the next book in the series!


  12. quilltwist says:

    This sounds really promising and I can’t think of anything that it would be similar to. Best of luck with this great idea!


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