The Untold Story of Margaret Hearst, alias Maugrim Valletta by Briana Vedsted

I recently read and reviewed The Untold Story of Margaret Hearst by Briana Vedsted.  It is a short story that I would call a romantic western.

First, I did find many of the characters to be rather unlikeable, but I think that was the point. LJ was the most likeable even though he came off a little spineless, but again I think that was the point of him. Margaret definitely struck me as a character who lived a sheltered life because she doesn’t think things through and is truly her own worst enemy. Her inner thoughts can be rather childish for a twenty-year-old, which I think comes from her sheltered background.  Overall, I think the characters are very clear and work well to carry the story along.

My big criticism for this story is that there is so much potential here. I mean, there was a lot that was hinted at that could have been used to make this a bigger, wilder romantic adventure. I would have liked to see more of a build-up to the Matthew/Margaret romance and more behind LJ. I think the author could get a longer, deeper, more enjoyable story if she extended some of the events. For .99 cents, it’s worth it to see how talented the author is at weaving a story, but I really felt like she was holding herself back or rushing out of excitement. So, hopefully one day I come back here to find that this e-book has grown bigger and deeper.

About Charles Yallowitz

Charles E. Yallowitz was born, raised, and educated in New York. Then he spent a few years in Florida, realized his fear of alligators, and moved back to the Empire State. When he isn't working hard on his epic fantasy stories, Charles can be found cooking or going on whatever adventure his son has planned for the day. 'Legends of Windemere' is his first series, but it certainly won't be his last.
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1 Response to The Untold Story of Margaret Hearst, alias Maugrim Valletta by Briana Vedsted

  1. bvedsted says:

    Reblogged this on When I Became an Author and commented:
    Review from the very talented author, Charles Yallowitz. Thank you so much sir!

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