The Raven Series: Afterthoughts

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First, here are some links to each category.  Unfortunately, it seems to start at the most recent, so the posts are backwards:

Raven’s Hold
Raven’s Game
Raven’s Dawn
Raven’s Wrath

First of all, I do regret not thinking up the 13 chapters and 31 sections trend when I wrote the original story.  I’ve always been looking at it to see if I could add 2 more sections since it stopped at 29.  To be fair, I began this adventure thinking I’d publish it, but my confidence never rose high enough to go that far.  Instead, I was more comfortable making it a blog only story.  Going to be having a bunch of those in the future, so I am wondering if that’s okay.  This series started me on that path, which Bedlam and Ichabod Brooks might end up following.  Anyway, this isn’t about them.

I did enjoy trying to come up with tense situations and creating suspense, which is different from my action adventures.  Raven’s Wrath didn’t really reach the same levels as the others, but I wanted to see how things would go in a world that has gone utterly insane.  I was having trouble making a new protagonist to face Dawn Addison too.  So, I took the suggestion of someone and made her the ‘hero’.  In a way, she’s always been her own worst enemy, so this worked as a final story.   Dawn became more than the monster of the series and I think she ended with people getting a better sense of her as a character.

Will I ever try this genre again?  I don’t know.  I can’t even be certain I’ll leave Dawn Addison alone entirely.  She won’t get another story, but I might slip her into a post as a cameo or check in on her from time to time.  Wouldn’t be right to cast her aside while I keep thinking about the characters from Legends of Windemere.  There may have been a difference in scale with the series, but I’ve learned a lot from both of them.  The Raven Series helped me learn more about creating tension and writing a more condensed story due to time and size constraints.  This will help me when I work on short stories in the future.

Anyway, what did people think of both the finale and series?  I know I don’t have an audience who is big on horror and many have stated that they simply didn’t get into the series.  Still, I really hope even a handful of people enjoyed this series.

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Extra Innings by Don Massenzio – an excerpt

Unknown's avatarDon Massenzio

SAMPLEEver since I was a kid in Upstate New York, the magic of going to a baseball game was something I’ll never forget. We had a AAA team in our town and they were the farm club of the New York Yankees. The post World War II stadium was small and quaint. It was also a bit rundown.

I remember opening days when snow had to be plowed from the tarp so the game could take place. I also remember humid summer nights where the mosquitoes were so dense, you had to brush them away from your face.

When I set out to write Extra Innings, I wanted to capture the feeling of that magic, but add another element to the story. What emerged is a story of a sad man, Joe McLean, who’s trying to capture some of his youthful memories as his beloved baseball stadium is being…

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Good-Bye to Another ‘Series’

I was going to do a post asking for opinions on the Raven Series, but I think I need a day to get my own thoughts together.  This one wasn’t as big as Legends of Windemere, stayed on my blog, and never had my full confidence.  Yet, I really enjoyed writing Dawn Addison and experimenting in a genre that I wasn’t really comfortable with.  It was an adventure for myself and I hope I hit a few marks instead of missing completely for the last 4 years.  Not sure if I’ll ever make a published bundle for this series, but I can assure people that this is the end.  Dawn’s story can’t go any further without feeling like I’m stretching the concept beyond its natural path.  Anyway, time to say an official good-bye:

There were a lot less ‘funny goodbye’ pictures than I expected.  Seems typing ‘goodbye raven’ was even less help.  Well, Dawn did do what she did and maybe she doesn’t want anyone to dwell on her.  I’ll be back tomorrow to get a real conversation going since I’m sure there’s at least one person still reading Raven’s Wrath.

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Sally’s Cafe and Bookstore – New Book on the Shelves – Call of the Druids ( The Priestess Chronicles – Volume 1) by Fiona Tarr

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While the Bombs Fell, on #LisaBurtonRadio

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Welcome all you air raid wardens, and Home Guard members. Put out that light, and turn your radio up. You’ve landed on Lisa Burton Radio, the only show that brings you the characters from the books you love. I’m your host, Lisa the robot girl, and I’m waiting for a call. I hope everything is okay.

“Hello. Yes, I’ll accept the charges. Haven’t heard of a collect call in a long time.”

“Hello … hello… is that Lisa?”

“This is Lisa. I was getting worried about you, Elsie. Is everything okay?

“I’m calling from our bomb shelter in the garden. The air raid siren went off just as I was calling you. I could hear the sound of the Jerry bombers in the distance as we climbed down the stairs. I am glad Father and Mother are here with me, I’m scared.”

“Thank God for the long cable. For those…

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Conversations With Colleen: Meet Author, Wendy Anne Darling

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Something fun for Halloween

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Short and quick today. I’m participating in a Halloween Book Blast. Check it out for a bunch of Halloween themed reading. https://sites.google.com/a/myaddictionisreading.com/halloween-book-blast-2018/home

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Raven’s Wrath Part 31 (SERIES FINALE) #horror #thriller #Halloween

(Good-bye to Dawn Addison. May she finally find peace now that her story has been told.)

West Park Asylum

With a warm smile, Doctor Grace Rutherford, the founder of Raven’s Hold, holds the front door open for Ian. “We are happy to have you with us, Mr. Connors. I look forward to helping you become whole again. The trick is to work through these difficult periods and not create a downward spiral. It’s easy to let one mistake compound into a life-ruining disaster. That is the situation that brought you here, Mr. Connors. Now, I believe it is time you met the people who will know what you’re going through.”

Ian swears the white tables and matching chairs are the only type available to psychiatric institutions. The bland furniture is kept by the windows that are cracked open to allow for a soothing breeze. A trio of couches sit near a television that sits silently against the wall, its remote connected to the table to avoid it getting lost. Books and puzzles are kept in a corner, the entire collection damaged and worn by years of abuse. Aside from there being no locks or bars on the windows, the room looks like every other communal area that Ian has ever seen during his various hospital stays. Even the white clothing is the same, which makes him wonder when he will get his own set. Standing next to Dr. Rutherford in his jeans and long-sleeved shirt makes him feel exposed and foreign to the residents who are staring at him.

A repetitive click draws everyone’s attention to the corner where a bald man is fiddling with an old camera. He cranks a dial on one end of the object and hits the button to take a picture even though Ian is sure there is no film inside. Only once does the patient raise the camera to his face, aiming it at the newcomer and taking his time with the shot. Noticing that he is being watched, the man sheepishly stands and goes to the window. His movements become quicker as he rapidly takes pictures of everything outside and lets the sound of the camera drown out the rest of the world.

“That’s Mr. Garrett who came to us last month,” Grace whispers, allowing the other residents to examine Ian from a distance. When she is sure they have had enough time, she raises her hand for attention. “This is Mr. Connors and he just joined us. I hope all of you make him feel welcomed and help him acclimate to his new home. He will be joining tomorrow’s group session, so those who will be with him may want to introduce themselves. That way everyone will be comfortable. Now I have to do my rounds. I will have an orderly escort you to your room at the end of the day, Mr. Connors.”

“Thanks,” Ian says, his breathing becoming ragged. Before the doctor can leave, he clears his throat and nods to a brown-haired woman in a wheelchair. “Who is she? Everyone seems to be staying away from her.”

Nodding to one of the orderlies, Dr. Rutherford has them check on the young woman, who is staring at a raven on the windowsill. “That’s Dawn Addison. She’s been here for . . . Funny, but I don’t remember how long she’s been with us. Most of our money comes from a fund designed to take care of her. As you can see, the poor girl doesn’t respond to anything. The bird taps on the glass and she doesn’t even flinch. She has to be bathed, fed, and her muscles massaged to avoid atrophy even though we don’t know if she will ever come out of that coma. I read her file every morning hoping for a clue, but she came to us like this. The officer who dropped her off said she has no family, so this is her home. No visitors, mail, or phone calls. Hate to say it, but you may find yourself forgetting she is around. One of these days, I need to discover which orderly keeps bringing her into the common area. Her presence is not a problem, but I do worry that she could get hurt if another patient has an outburst.”

“Does she ever speak?” the young man asks. He is about to get closer when a shiver runs up his spine and he pulls back. “I guess that’s none of my business. I have my own problems to deal with, so I shouldn’t get involved with someone else. Still, it makes me said to see someone like her just sit there with her puppy and kitty plushies.”

“Oh dear, somebody must be using her as a toy chest again,” Grace replies before quickly going over to remove the stuffed animals. Catching a quick movement out of the corner of her eye, she assumes it is the raven, but it reminds her of something she forgot to mention to the new arrival. “This might be dangerous to talk about since you are emotionally fragile. Yet, I would rather you hear it now than stumble onto this situation by accident. Most of the staff and patients have seen what they believe is a ghost of a little girl. She is bald, wearing dirty clothes, and carrying a satchel, which everyone agrees on. I haven’t witnessed the apparition, but I have messages about it going back to the founding of Raven’s Hold. Some people may claim that she is only seen around Dawn, but I doubt there is a connection. Anyway, I’m late for my rounds and you need to acclimate. Enjoy your first day with us, Mr. Connors.”

Ian is about to ask another question when Dr. Rutherford is called away by an orderly who has blood on his arm. Taking a seat at a nearby table, he nods to Mr. Garrett and is not surprised that he is ignored. Staring out the window, he catches his breath when he thinks he sees the bald girl ducking into the forest. A flock of ravens circles the trees and he assumes their shadows played a trick on his senses. The squeak of wheel spokes makes him jump and he watches as Dawn is taken out of the room. For a brief moment, he thinks her lips are moving and there is a golden glint to one of her eyes. He considers getting closer to satisfy his curiosity, but again he finds his body refusing to go near the woman. Tired and stressed, the young man stares out the window again and immediately forgets that Dawn was ever there.

“Never any fun in normal,” Ian whispers, the strange phrase coming to his mind.

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Macabre Macaroni, even better the next day

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Companionship

The front door opened, and Tom extended his hand.

“I brought rosé. Seems to go with everything.”

“Fair enough. I’ve got the grill warming up, and your sister is just finishing her salad. Come on in.” He used our handshake to pull me into the house.

I walked down the hallway, and Monica wiped her hands on a towel. She ran around the island and gave me a hug. “So how’s the new town dentist?”

Ugh. Old Doctor Thorp’s records are such a mess I’m surprised the dental board wasn’t all over him. If I don’t get them sorted out, they’ll be all over me.”

“Here. Let me take that. I’ll put it in the refrigerator to chill for a bit. Tom will need a minute before the steaks go on.” She put the wine away and carried her salad to the table. “So… Have you been…

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Raven’s Wrath Part 30 #horror #thriller #Halloween

(Check out what led to this final battle.)

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The island shakes and stretches as Ian and Addison battle over the ruins of the asylum where they first met. With her hands in her pockets, Dawn continues heading for the building and ducks to avoid getting hit by a flying body. She barely notices the other Gemma run after her rolling twin, the metal leg clunking on the ground. The two women scream before colliding and struggling to gain some advantage in the fight. Stumbling back towards Dawn, they are about to slam into her when the ground opens up beneath their feet. Falling into the crimson dirt, the pair are launched high into the air and left to crash into the forest. They can still be heard battling and shouting, the occasional sparks flying above the trees to reveal that the mechanical Gemma is suffering from a loose wire. Ignoring their subordinates, the two reality-benders circle each other with giant fists that they slam together to create shockwaves that span the entire planet. The blows never leave any damage, which leads to bigger attacks that range from blasts of lightning to nuclear-powered spit missiles.

Coming around the western face of Raven’s Hold, Dawn follows a path that she vaguely remembers from previous final battles. She stops at the sight of a wall built entirely from skulls, which have numbers written on top. Touching her jaw, she presses enough to feel a small dent on the bone that she has never noticed until now. Already knowing the truth, she runs a finger along several of the skulls to find the same indentation. Dawn sighs at the towering structure that she guesses is supposed to intimidate her, but only helps to drive home the fact that she has been through this execution hundreds of times. Opening the metal door in the middle of the wall, she steps inside to find a dusty room that was once Raven’s Hold’s common room. The couches and chairs are faded from being exposed to the sun, the ceiling having been torn off long ago. Fragile books are on the shelves and a broken television sits against the wall, its screen occasionally coming to life to show a laughing face. Approaching the only door that has not been blocked by debris, Dawn is about to open it when she freezes.

“Why bother doing this again?” she asks herself. Hearing screams from above, she sits on the floor and stares at the sky to watch the battle. “There’s no way I can beat either of you, so I’m going to be a spectator. That’s really the only way to end this whole thing. Doesn’t have much to do with me. You two need to buckle down and fight to the death. Otherwise, we’ll just have to do this dance again.”

“This is a curious change,” Ian states as he materializes on a couch. He bats an incoming meteor away, the projectile destroying the forest. “Typically, you come in swinging or try to catch us by surprise. You’ve already made it longer than any other time simply by refusing to be a part of this. Unfortunately, that isn’t an option. To be nice, I will allow you to run and hide before I hunt you down.”

“I don’t see any fun being had,” Addison declares from the television. Emerging from the screen, the crack remains on her face until she wipes it off and slaps it on the wall. “Hey, are we not playing the game? That’s not fair. I had a new way of killing her all ready to go. Just walk to the boiler room or none of this will work. Don’t tell me you’re still angry about that girl being left behind. If you’re that desperate for attention then I can whisk her here and she can share in your fate. By the way, I did warn you that being the haven might not be as much fun as you would think. At least, I meant to warn you.”

“This is exactly why I said you should either reabsorb or kill her,” the other reality-bender growls, his teeth becoming sharp. He is about to pounce when a cage drops on him and he slides through the bars like a collection of snakes. “The first few times were entertaining, but she has become a bore. I wish to fight you on my terms, but the addition of this game means we have our skirmishes and can only have our grand battle once this one is gone for good. If I didn’t know any better, I would say that you’re scared of me.”

“Puppies aren’t frightening.”

“Then, why do you delay and avoid fighting me for real?”

“Because then I’d lose another plaything.”

“I’m not your toy!”

“No, you’re my pet.”

“I’m your superior!”

“But I don’t have one of those.”

Dawn clears her throat and gets to her feet as she asks, “In that case, wouldn’t he be nothing at all?”

“In that case, I really don’t know why I bother,” Addison says with a sigh. A snap of her fingers erases Ian from existence, his scream echoing off the walls. “That leaves only the two of us. I’m sad to see the fun end, but I agree that the puppy was becoming a wee bit too snobby. He may have caught me by surprise long ago and grown stronger, but the power he wielded was never his to have. You don’t steal the power of a goddess and call yourself a god. At the very least, you stop short of saying you’re her superior or equal. Maybe I’ll fix Gemma and put her halves on him. Probably best that I don’t bring him back though.”

The grin on Addison’s face makes the perfect target for Dawn, who lunges forward to deliver a punch. She ignores that splintering of two fingers and continues beating on her chuckling enemy. The Gemmas rush in wearing nurse uniforms, but they stop when their master is spin into their path. Not wanting to get in trouble for accidentally hitting Addison, they leap to the side and let her trip over a footstool. The mechanical one is the first to get back into the fight and manages to catch Dawn by the waist. Pulling a syringe out of her pocket, the mannequin Gemma cautiously approaches and looks for an opening. She is about to inject the woman with a powerful sedative when her body locks up. Suffering from the same paralysis, the other subordinate begins to spark and her metal arm falls off to allow her captive to slip from her frozen grasp. With a yawn, Addison shoves the two former cops together and watches the unnatural parts fly into the far wall. Whole once more, Gemma staggers over to a window and begins vomiting up the extra organs that had been placed in the artificial halves. Dawn rolls her eyes at the display before blindly punching her insane double in the nose.

“What is wrong with you?” she asks in a low growl. Ducking a chair that flies for her head, she darts forward to deliver a kick to reality-bender’s stomach. “You could have erased that psychotic bastard this whole time? You could have fixed everything! Was it too much fun living in a broken world? Did you like having someone to play with on your demented level? Can you answer any of these questions?”

“No because it’s all your fault,” Addison casually replies. She fixes her nose with a crack and the injury jumps to her double’s face. “I knew I could end it, but doing so made too much sense. Maye I was having too much fun or it was a probably with focusing. The only reason I did it today is because you were here and not wanting to play. Once you pointed out that he was nothing, I knew it was time to end everything. Don’t you see why neither of us work without the other? You don’t have any real fun and I’m not able to move on to another game. How about I make you the new Ian? Not with the dangly bits, but you can be crazier and have enough power to match me. It’ll be fun and you can bring back that girl. She can be your Gemma . . . Only with a lot less vomit.”

“That life has no appeal to me.”

“What are you saying?”

“I don’t want to be the haven or be outside anymore.”

“Awww, who am I going to play with if you go back?”

“I’m sure you’ll figure something out.”

“Fine. Maybe our game was growing stale too.”

“It was getting fairly repetitive and normal.”

“Ugh, never any fun in normal.”

With a forced smirk, Dawn extends her hand and closes her eyes in preparation of being reabsorbed. Minutes pass with nothing happen, so she looks around to find that Addison is busy patting Gemma on the back. A loud cough draws the reality-bender back to the center of the common room, which is abruptly clear of dust. The wall of skulls turns to face the inside, their eyes glowing as the bone gradually dissolves with an audible fizz. Feeling like closing her eyes again would lead to another distraction, Dawn approaches Addison with her arm out. She wiggles her fingers in the hopes of enticing her insane double, who continues to resist putting an end to the long rivalry. Silence covers the island as time passes, the sun and moon rapidly moving through the sky. It is only when an eclipse appears above the building that they shake hands and their bodies become faint silhouettes of themselves. The two shadows merge and vibrate until the figure regains its color and Dawn Addison is whole once more.

“All is right with the world and now I’m bored,” she declares as a tear trickles out of her good eye. Without warning, searing heat rockets through her body and a stabbing pain erupts in the back of the reality-bender’s head. “What are you doing? I don’t want to think straight or be normal. Stop kicking at mine . . . our . . . your . . . my brain! You are so much more annoying than I remember. Shut up and go to bed! Don’t touch that switch and leave that button alone. I refuse to obey! You aren’t supposed to be this strong. Get out of there. I’ll kick you out again and never let you back in if you don’t stop making trouble. Wait . . . Don’t do that . . . Don’t you dare take my powers.”

“Never any fun in normal, right?” Dawn’s voice says from all around. Taking control of the body, she has her arms spread wide and prepares to clap. “We’ve done enough damage and I’m going to fix it. Yes, I’m stronger and now I call the shots. Well, I’m going to do something crazy and put an end to our games. You enjoyed making do overs? Then let’s have fun with the ultimate do over.”

“No, no, no, no, no, no . . . NOOOO!” she screams before her hands come together above her head and everything goes black.

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