War of Nytefall: Anarchy Blurb Test

War of Nytefall

Here’s an embarrassing admission.  I kind of forgot that I was going to publish a book right before Labor Day.  Well, I forgot in that I didn’t realize how quickly the summer is going.  War of Nytefall: Anarchy has been edited a few times.  I still need to hand it off to my usual reader, which I’ll get to this week.  Of course, I needed to move posts around and now I have to jump from September promo posts to continuing the new book.  I’ll go more into that on Saturday because this post isn’t about that.

Just spent an hour work on a blurb for War of Nytefall: Anarchy and it’s really difficult to do this one.  I don’t know why I’m having trouble explaining the story in a shortened term.  Could be due to their being a ton of twists and turns, so everything that isn’t vague feels like a spoiler.  Still, I think it came out well if not lacking in polish.  Let me know what you think and, of course, I’m hoping to get a few people to post promos when the book is out.  It’s the only move I’ve got these days.

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The paladins of Windemere have had enough!

As the Vampire Civil War heats up, mysterious murders are being committed against members of every holy order.  All signs point to the culprits being vampires, which is has resulted in the creation of a unified paladin army. To protect his people, Clyde must find the killers before the holy warriors unleash their purifying crusade. It is a battle against frustrating obstacles as the war inches closer to mortal civilization and ambitious new allies join Nytefall. One slip is all that is needed for the secret of the Dawn Fangs to be revealed.

Will Clyde be able to keep things together long enough to win his war or is this the end of his secret?

About Charles Yallowitz

Charles E. Yallowitz was born, raised, and educated in New York. Then he spent a few years in Florida, realized his fear of alligators, and moved back to the Empire State. When he isn't working hard on his epic fantasy stories, Charles can be found cooking or going on whatever adventure his son has planned for the day. 'Legends of Windemere' is his first series, but it certainly won't be his last.
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13 Responses to War of Nytefall: Anarchy Blurb Test

  1. I like the blurb, and put me down for a stop on your tour.

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  2. ‘which (delete is) has resulted in the creation of a unified paladin army.’
    I think you can delete ‘Will Clyde be able to keep things together long enough to win his war or is this the end of his secret?’ Readers (like me) are more interested in HOW he overcomes this latest challenge.
    To ramp up the blurb, I suggest: the following split up:
    As the Vampire Civil War heats up, mysterious murders are being committed against members of every holy order. All signs point to the culprits being vampires, which has resulted in the creation of a unified paladin army.
    To protect his people, Clyde must find the killers before the holy warriors unleash their purifying crusade. It is a battle against frustrating obstacles as the war inches closer to mortal civilization and ambitious new allies join Nytefall.
    One slip is all that is needed for the secret of the Dawn Fangs to be revealed.

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  3. Yep – BTW, add me in for your promo tour, Charles 😃

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  4. Victoria Zigler says:

    I like the blurb, though agree with Chris about that last line not being needed.

    Also, put me down for a post when you’re ready to promote the book.

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  5. Looks like I’m late to the party. You’re always welcome at my place.

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  6. L. Marie says:

    Sounds good! And when I finally return to posting (this editing project has taken just about all of my time), please count me in!

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